Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ, sử dụng câu chủ đề rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: những hoạt động bạn làm, tần suất, cảm xúc). Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và giữ độ dài câu dưới 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents to play games and make friends, usually on weekends. We also exercised together, such as jogging or playing ball, which helped improve my health. Those visits made me feel happy and energetic.

제안: Cần trả lời gọn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm ý không rõ (ví dụ “walk away” không phù hợp). Sử dụng liên từ để so sánh quá khứ và hiện tại, nêu rõ tần suất và hoạt động cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but for different reasons now. Currently I usually go there to relax and chat with friends a few times a week. I also play badminton or take brisk walks to stay fit. Overall, parks are a pleasant place for both exercise and socialising.

제안: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên (ví dụ “I would like to see more parks”) và tránh tiếng ừ à. Nên nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao cần thêm công viên (sức khỏe, không gian xanh, chỗ chơi cho trẻ em) và một ví dụ ngắn về công viên gần nhà.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For example, there is a park near my house where I often exercise with my parents and hang out with friends. More parks would improve residents' health and quality of life.

제안: Cần diễn đạt thì tương lai đúng (ví dụ “I would like to visit...”), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Nên nêu tên hoặc loại công viên muốn đến, lý do cụ thể (không khí, cảnh quan, hoạt động) và cảm xúc của bạn.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in Singapore in the future because I have heard they are very spacious and have fresh air. I am especially interested in seeing the gardens and modern park designs, and I think visiting them would be both relaxing and inspiring.

× Yes, I like yes, I like going to parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The question asks about past preference as a child, so past tense should be used. Use 'liked' instead of 'like' to match 'as a child'. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in the past: 'I liked going to parks.'

× When I was a child at that time I often went to the park to make friends and did exercise with my parents to improve my health and health and had a empty.

✓ When I was a child I often went to the park to make friends, exercised with my parents to improve my health, and had free time.

Multiple problems: redundancy and incorrect noun phrase 'had a empty' (article and adjective order). Use past simple consistently for past habits ('went', 'exercised', 'had'). 'Empty' is incorrect here; likely intended 'free time'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in past simple and use correct noun phrase: 'had free time.'

× Yes, I still like going to park now, but different, but differently.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park now, but in a different way.

Missing definite article before 'park' and incorrect use of 'different/differently'. Use 'the park' for a general place and 'in a different way' or 'differently' correctly in context. Suggestion: Use 'the park' and 'in a different way'.

× Nowadays I often go to the park to relax and chat with my friends.

✓ Nowadays I often go to the park to relax and chat with my friends.

This sentence is correct. Verbs 'relax' and 'chat' are appropriately used in the infinitive after 'to'. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is.

× Umm, I often go there to play badminton and uh, walk away.

✓ I often go there to play badminton and to take walks.

'Walk away' implies leaving something; the intended meaning is likely 'take a walk' or 'go for a walk.' Use 'to take walks' or 'to go for a walk'. Suggestion: Use 'take a walk' or 'go for a walk'.

× Yes, I delight to see more parks in my city, umm, uh, for example, in my uh, in my uh, in nearby my house, uh also have also have a park and umm, I often go to the park there to exercise with my parents and hang out.

✓ Yes, I would be delighted to see more parks in my city. For example, near my house there is a park where I often go to exercise with my parents and hang out.

Incorrect verb 'delight' used as stative verb; correct phrase is 'would be delighted' or 'am delighted'. Word order and articles are incorrect: use 'near my house' and 'there is a park' (There be structure) and 'where I often go'. Suggestion: Use 'I would be delighted' and correct word order: 'near my house there is a park'.

× Yes, uh, I went to the park in the Singapore countries in the future, uh, because I heard that in the park in the in here had had a has the space are airy and fresh and I interested in.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the parks in Singapore in the future because I heard that the parks there are spacious, airy, and fresh, and I am interested in visiting them.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verbs: 'went' is past, but sentence refers to future desire—use 'would like to go' or 'want to go'. Incorrect noun phrase 'Singapore countries' should be 'Singapore' or 'parks in Singapore'. 'Had had a has the space are airy' is ungrammatical; use 'the parks there are spacious, airy, and fresh'. 'I interested in' needs 'I am interested in visiting them' or 'I am interested'. Suggestion: Use 'would like to go' and proper adjective order: 'spacious, airy, and fresh', and include 'visiting' as needed.