Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid repetition and unclear words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (activities, memories) using linking words. Correct word choice and grammar (e.g. "playground" or "carousel" instead of unclear term) will improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed trees with my friends, which I remember as very exciting. Those visits helped me become more confident and social.

제안: Give a direct answer then add specific activities and reasons. Use correct adjectives (e.g. "extroverted") and grammar for verbs and tenses. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I am an extroverted person who likes outdoor activities. For example, I often ride my bike or go for a run along the river, which helps me relax and boosts my energy.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with clear linking words (e.g. "because", "so"). Avoid vague repetition and use correct phrasing like "more parks" or "green spaces". Provide one concrete benefit (health, environment, community) to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve people’s mental health and encourage exercise. For instance, more parks would give families places to relax and children safe areas to play.

제안: Name the park correctly and give specific reasons why you want to visit. Use a clear conditional or future tense and avoid repeating words. Add one detail about what you would do there or expect to see.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because it is famous for its scenery and activities. If I go to the USA, I would rent a bike and explore the lakes and the walking paths, which I think would be very enjoyable.

× Of course, when I was younger, I was quite an outgoing person because I usually went to the park.

✓ Of course, when I was younger, I was quite an outgoing person because I usually went to the park.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses past tense 'was' and 'went' to describe a past habitual action. Keep consistent past tense for past habits. Grammar problem type ID:5

× That time was very interesting for me.

✓ That time was very enjoyable for me.

Original is grammatical but 'interesting' is odd when describing personal experience; 'enjoyable' or 'pleasant' fits better. This is a word choice/style issue; to improve, select adjectives that match the intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I found, I found found the baristable for me.

✓ I found the park suitable for me.

Original contains repetition and a nonword 'baristable'. This is a sentence structure and word-choice error. Use a clear subject-verb-object structure and correct vocabulary: 'found' + object + adjective ('suitable'). Grammar problem type ID:26

× So currently I used I, I usually go to the park.

✓ Currently I usually go to the park.

Mixes past 'used' with present habitual 'usually go'. Remove 'used' to maintain present simple tense for current habits. Use one clear subject and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Of course, I'm very ultra troubled and troubled is extrovert person, so I usually go to a park.

✓ Of course, I'm very outgoing and an extroverted person, so I usually go to the park.

Original misuses 'ultra troubled' and repeats 'troubled'; 'outgoing' and 'extroverted' are appropriate adjectives. Also include the article 'an' before 'extroverted person' and use 'the park' for a habitual place when previously mentioned. Grammar problem type ID:13

× There are a beautiful park in my country, so I usually go to park.

✓ There is a beautiful park in my country, so I usually go to the park.

Use singular 'There is' with 'a beautiful park'. When referring to a specific park previously mentioned, use 'the park'. Also include 'the' before 'park'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I go to park, I riding a bike on going for a run along the river.

✓ When I go to the park, I ride a bike or go for a run along the river.

Use base form 'ride' and 'go' after 'I' for habitual actions (present simple). Also correct article 'the park' and replace incorrect 'riding a bike on going' with parallel verbs joined by 'or'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× This time is improve my energy.

✓ This helps improve my energy.

Original lacks grammatical subject-verb agreement and uses wrong tense. Use present simple 'helps' to describe a habitual effect and infinitive 'improve'. Alternatively, 'This time improves my energy' is possible but less natural. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Of course, being being a many park is very important.

✓ Of course, having many parks is very important.

Replace duplicated 'being', use 'having' to express possession, and 'many parks' (no article). 'Being a many park' is ungrammatical. Use noun phrase 'many parks'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Most people park.

✓ Most people go to parks.

Original 'Most people park' is ambiguous (could mean 'they park vehicles'). To express that people visit parks, say 'go to parks'. Ensure verb matches intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Park makes most people feel happy.

✓ Parks make most people feel happy.

Use plural 'Parks' to generalize and plural verb 'make'. Alternatively 'A park makes people feel happy.' Ensure subject-verb agreement when generalizing. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So I also like a park.

✓ So I also like parks.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. 'A park' suggests a single unspecified park; 'parks' conveys general preference. Grammar problem type ID:26

× So I'd like to more, I'd like to creative, the more park, more park.

✓ So I'd like to have more parks; I'd like more creative parks.

Original is fragmented and uses incorrect verbs. Use 'have more parks' to express desire for quantity and 'creative parks' to express a quality. Keep sentences concise and grammatical. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Of course I want to go Grand Central Park.

✓ Of course I want to go to Grand Central Park.

Include preposition 'to' before place names when indicating travel destinations: 'go to Grand Central Park.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× Grand Central Park known for a very great park.

✓ Grand Central Park is known for being a great park.

Missing verb 'is' and awkward phrasing 'known for a very great park.' Use passive 'is known for' plus gerund phrase 'being a great park.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× So when I go when if I go to us A, I really want to go Grand Central Park.

✓ So if I go to the USA, I really want to go to Grand Central Park.

Remove redundant 'when', use conditional 'if' appropriately, write 'USA' as a single word, and include 'to' before the park. Modal/conditional structure should be clear. Grammar problem type ID:4

× This experience made me feel happy.

✓ This experience makes me feel happy.

If referring to a future or anticipated visit, use present simple 'makes' to describe the effect in general or present/future. If referring to a past visit, original is correct. Clarify timeframe. Here change to 'makes' to align with desire to visit (general effect). Grammar problem type ID:5