Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và không rõ ràng; cần trả lời trực tiếp, mở rộng bằng một câu chủ đề và 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ để tự nhiên và đầy đủ hơn. Sử dụng thì thích hợp (quá khứ) và liên kết đơn giản nếu có thêm chi tiết.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I used to visit with my parents every weekend and enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the flower beds, which made me feel free and happy.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính và chi tiết hỗ trợ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng chưa chính xác và hơi dài; cần sửa thì (every week), ngữ pháp động từ (he has), và dùng liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu và tránh lặp từ.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks and I try to visit one every week because they are great places to relax. For example, my boyfriend and I usually go for a walk or have a short picnic when he has free time on weekends.

제안: Ý tưởng hợp lý nhưng diễn đạt lộn xộn, nhiều lỗi cấu trúc và từ không phù hợp; cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng, lý do cụ thể và ví dụ ngắn gọn. Sửa lỗi cấu trúc ('we're in space' meaningless), dùng từ chính xác (provide a space for relaxation, walking paths) và tránh câu quá dài.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide spaces for relaxation and exercise. For example, newly built parks with playgrounds and walking paths would encourage families to spend more time outdoors.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp ('ruins Bay', 'release our exercise'); cần một câu chủ đề rõ ràng nêu công viên cụ thể hoặc loại công viên, sau đó cung cấp lý do và một chi tiết về kế hoạch. Sử dụng thì tương lai đơn cho dự định và chỉnh cấu trúc câu.

예시: Yes, I plan to visit some of the new parks in my city, especially the recently opened riverside park. I want to try its walking trails next month because it looks like a pleasant place for exercise and relaxing by the water.

× Yes, and I go to the park.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the park.

The student is answering a question about childhood habits, so past habitual tense is required. 'I go to the park' is present tense and doesn't match 'as a child'. Use 'used to' for past habitual actions: 'I used to go to the park.'

× Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I try to visit one very week because it's a great place to relax and get some friends out.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I try to visit one every week because it's a great place to relax and meet up with friends.

Errors: 'very week' should be 'every week' (wrong word choice), 'get some friends out' is ungrammatical and intended meaning is 'meet up with friends'. Maintain present simple for regular habits. Use 'meet up with' or 'meet' for socializing.

× Usually my boyfriend and I go for a walk or a short picnic when he have free time on weekends.

✓ Usually my boyfriend and I go for a walk or have a short picnic when he has free time on weekends.

Subject-verb agreement: 'he have' is incorrect; third person singular requires 'has'. Also adjust verb parallelism: 'go for a walk or have a short picnic'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we're in space provide place for relation, for example, newly built parks with playground in working paths with families and people to spend more time outdoors and.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we need more spaces that provide places for relaxation, such as newly built parks with playgrounds and walking paths where families and people can spend more time outdoors.

Multiple structural issues: 'we're in space provide place for relation' is ungrammatical and unclear. Should be 'we need more spaces that provide places for relaxation'. 'playground' should be plural 'playgrounds'; 'working paths' should be 'walking paths'. Sentence ended abruptly with 'and.' Reorganize to be clear and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I would like to visit new parks in my city because I enjoy exploring this from ruins Bay and their great place to release our exercise.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit new parks in my city because I enjoy exploring new areas and they are great places to exercise.

Confusing and incorrect phrases: 'exploring this from ruins Bay' is unclear; replace with 'exploring new areas'. 'Their great place to release our exercise' is ungrammatical; use 'they are great places to exercise'. Keep present tense for preferences.

× For example, I planned to discover in recently opened park near the river next month to try its walking.

✓ For example, I plan to visit the recently opened park near the river next month to try its walking paths.

Tense inconsistency: 'I planned' (past) should be 'I plan' or 'I am planning' to indicate a future plan. 'discover in recently opened park' is incorrect; use 'visit the recently opened park'. 'try its walking' is incomplete—use 'try its walking paths' or 'try walking there'.