Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my mother often took me to the playground and helped me on the slides, which made me feel excited and safe. Those visits are some of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason with a linking word. Use smoother phrasing and fewer hesitations.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks now because I live next to one and it is the best place for walking and thinking. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk there to clear my mind and enjoy the fresh air.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Replace fillers with clear vocabulary (e.g. benefits for families, community). Provide one concrete example.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and meet friends. For example, new small parks near residential areas would make it easier for families to spend time outside and build community relationships.

제안: Respond with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details such as when it opened and why you want to visit. Reduce repetition and hesitations.

예시: Yes, I want to visit Nabate Park in Baku, which opened a month or two ago. I have never been there, and I am curious to see its design and new facilities, so I plan to visit it next weekend.

× Yes, I love the grand parking child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the big park as a child.

The original sentence uses incorrect word choices and order: 'grand parking child' is ungrammatical. 'Grand' is adjective but unnatural here; 'parking' is a noun/verb not appropriate; 'child' placed incorrectly. Use 'as a child' to indicate time. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'as a child' (habit in the past). Suggestion: use simple adjectives that fit: 'big park' or 'grand park'.

× I mostly going park with my mom.

✓ I mostly went to the park with my mom.

The original is missing the correct auxiliary/inflection: 'going' needs an auxiliary (am/was/will) or should be the past form 'went' for past habit. Also 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific park. Use past simple 'went' for repeated past actions: 'I mostly went to the park with my mom.'

× He put me on the slides yeah, I love the I love this uh attractions.

✓ She put me on the slides. I loved the attractions.

Pronoun 'He' likely refers to 'my mom', which is female, so use 'she'. Also the sentence is run-on and repetitive; separate into two sentences. Use past tense 'put' is fine, but 'I love the I love this uh attractions' should be corrected to past 'I loved the attractions' to match the past context. 'Attractions' does not need 'this'.

× It's give me I don't know, I think.

✓ It made me feel happy, I think.

The phrase 'It's give me' is grammatically incorrect: 'give' needs to be inflected for past or present and the verb form chosen should fit context. In past context use 'made me feel'. Also replace vague 'I don't know' with clearer reflection 'I think' or omit. Use appropriate verb + object structure: 'It made me feel happy.'

× Actually, I live next to the park sometimes it's most, it's, it's the best place for walking and thinking.

✓ Actually, I live next to a park. Sometimes it is the best place for walking and thinking.

Original mixes clauses and punctuation poorly. Use 'a park' unless a specific park previously mentioned; present simple 'I live' is fine. 'Sometimes it is the best place' should be a separate sentence; avoid filler 'it's most, it's, it's'. Keep 'walking and thinking' parallel.

× I love to, uh, stay in open air.

✓ I love to stay in the open air.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'open air' when referring to being outdoors in general: 'the open air'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Actually, it's the best place for the child.

✓ Actually, it's the best place for children.

'the child' is singular and unnatural here; use plural 'children' to refer to kids in general. Also 'the best place for children' is the correct noun phrase.

× Children, uh, they can, MMM, make, uh, friends.

✓ Children can make friends.

Avoid unnecessary pronoun duplication: 'Children, they' is redundant. Keep the subject 'Children' with the verb 'can make'. Remove fillers.

× They can talk their, uh, talk other children's,

✓ They can talk to other children.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'talk' when indicating the person being spoken to: 'talk to someone'. Also 'other children's' is possessive and incorrect; use plural noun 'children'. So 'talk to other children' is correct.

× Yeah, it's, it's the best option.

✓ Yes, it's a great option.

Stylistically, replace repeated fillers with a clear response. Use 'a great option' or 'the best option' depending on emphasis. 'It's a great option' is natural.

× They opened almost one or two months ago.

✓ It opened about one or two months ago.

If referring to a single park ('Nabate Park'), use singular 'It opened'. 'Almost' is awkward here; 'about' is better for approximating time. Maintain past simple for completed action.

× I I never uh, went there.

✓ I have never been there.

When talking about experience up to now, use present perfect 'have never been'. 'Went' is past simple and implies a specific time; 'been there' is the correct participle usage. Also remove repeated 'I' and filler.

× I want to uh, go here, go there.

✓ I want to go there.

The original is repetitive and unclear. Use 'go there' to indicate the intended place. Remove fillers and redundant phrases.