Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and contains minor grammar issues. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating conjunctions, correct tense consistency (use past tense throughout for childhood), and provide one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved playing outside as a child. Although there were no formal parks near my home, there was a large open field where my friends and I often played. For example, we would organize simple games and sit together to talk about school and tuition classes. That open space felt like our own park.

제안: Good answer with clear reasons and personal feeling. To improve, make the response more concise (max 3–4 sentences), fix minor grammar ("the futures" → "our futures"), and use linking words to connect reasons. Add a specific example of an activity you do there.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax and feel refreshed. For instance, I often walk with friends and we talk about our futures and family life. Additionally, I enjoy watching children play, which brightens my mood.

제안: The idea is relevant, but the answer is disorganized and has several grammar and coherence problems. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, separating ideas into concise sentences, correcting grammar (capitalization, plural forms), and giving a specific suggestion about what kind of parks you want and why. Use linking words to structure the response.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and improve people’s wellbeing. For example, I hope the government will create small neighborhood parks with trees, flowers, benches and playgrounds so residents can relax and enjoy cooler, calmer surroundings.

제안: This answer is unclear and contradictory. Clarify your intention (do you want to visit parks or not?), correct vocabulary ("perks" → "parks"), and give a clear reason. Use a topic sentence and one or two supporting details describing what you would like to do in a park or why you hesitate to go.

예시: Actually, I would like to visit parks in the future, but I have little experience of them. For example, I would like to try walking on a park trail and having a picnic, although I am unsure about park activities right now.

× I love to go there because I could play with my friends, chatting with them about schools and tuitions, etcetera.

✓ I loved going there because I could play with my friends and chat with them about school and tuition.

The response is about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. 'I love to go' is present; change to 'I loved going'. Also use base noun 'school' and 'tuition' without plural articles here. Combine 'chatting with them' into 'chat with them' for parallel structure.

× Yes, I still enjoy going to the parks with my friends because I feel relaxed and refreshed when I go there and we can also chat with each other about the futures and our homes.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my friends because I feel relaxed and refreshed when I go there, and we can also chat with each other about our futures and our homes.

Use plural 'parks' without 'the' when speaking generally. 'Futures' needs the possessive 'our' for clarity. Add a comma before the conjunction for readability. Maintain present tense consistently.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city I hope the new government of Nepal will make more space, greenery with trees and flowers and make more Parks in my city are all over the country where the peoples can feel relaxed, peace and cool enjoy the.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. I hope the new government of Nepal will create more green spaces with trees and flowers so that parks are available across the country where people can relax and enjoy the cool, peaceful environment.

Several article and word-choice errors: use 'would like' for polite wish, add period to separate sentences. 'create more green spaces' is natural phrasing; 'parks in my city are all over the country' was ungrammatical, so rephrase to 'parks are available across the country'. Use 'people' (not 'peoples') and avoid awkward word order 'relax and enjoy the cool, peaceful environment'. Capitalization of 'Parks' is unnecessary.

× No, there are no perks. I want to go in the future because I don't know what the park is and what should we do in the park or no, I don't want to go there.

✓ No, there are no parks I want to visit in the future because I don't know what a park is like or what we should do there, so I don't want to go.

Multiple structural problems: 'perks' is a typo for 'parks'. Combine ideas into a clear sentence: state that there are no parks the speaker wants to visit and give reasons. Use 'a park' and correct question-word order to declarative: 'what we should do there'. End with a clear conclusion 'so I don't want to go'.