Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 시제 사용을 개선하세요. 예를 들어 과거를 말할 때는 ‘when I was a child’와 같이 관사와 과거형 동사를 사용해야 합니다. 또한 불필요한 반복(‘Umm, no, I still…’)을 줄이고 한두 문장으로 명확히 말하세요. 연결어를 사용해 생각을 정리하고 구체적 세부사항(어떤 활동을 했는지, 누구와 갔는지)을 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often rode my bicycle there with my friends, and we spent hours playing games and exploring the trees.

제안: 의미 전달은 되지만 문법(소유격·복수형)과 표현의 자연스러움을 개선해야 합니다. ‘children’s’ 같은 잘못된 형태를 피하고 ‘children’로 쓰세요. 또한 중복되는 문장을 줄이고 이유를 구체적으로 말하세요(예: 아이들이 노는 모습이 즐거워서, 평화로운 분위기 등). 연결어(‘because’, ‘so’, ‘and’)를 적절히 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like watching children play. Their laughter creates a lively and cheerful atmosphere, and I often feel relaxed when I see families spending time together.

제안: 응답은 명확하지만 문장 연결과 자연스러운 이유 제시를 연습하세요. 반복을 줄이고 문장을 다듬어 원인-결과를 분명히 하세요. 예를 들어 ‘Because there are many buildings, I feel tired, so I want more parks’처럼 연결어와 완전한 문장을 사용하세요. 구체적 제안(어떤 종류의 공원이 필요한지)을 덧붙이면 더욱 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the area is dominated by buildings and concrete. As a result, green spaces would provide fresh air and relaxing places for people to exercise and socialise.

제안: 시제와 어순을 정확히 사용하세요(예: ‘I went to Barcelona last year’ 또는 ‘I want to go back to the parks in Barcelona’). 또한 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요(특정 공원의 이름이나 활동, 기억에 남는 경험 등). 문장을 2~3개로 간결하게 구성하면 자연스럽습니다.

예시: I would love to visit the parks in Barcelona again because I went there last year and enjoyed the pleasant climate and wide green lawns. For example, I remember relaxing near the trees and enjoying fresh air, which was very refreshing.

× Yes, when I was child I like to go into parks.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to go to parks.

The noun 'child' needs the singular article 'a' (singular and plural issue). Also the verb 'like' should be past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a child'. Use 'go to parks' rather than 'go into parks' for natural phrasing.

× Umm, no, I still like to go to parks and I like to ride a bicycle.

✓ Umm, yes, I still like to go to parks and I like to ride a bicycle.

The original reply 'no' contradicts the earlier positive answer; content correction to 'yes' fits speaker intent. The verbs 'like' are present tense and correct for current habitual actions.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because I love children at the parks.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because I love the children in the parks.

Use the definite article 'the' to refer to specific children in parks. Use preposition 'in' rather than 'at' for being inside the park area to sound natural.

× Umm, there are a lot of, there are many children's and their parents.

✓ Umm, there are a lot of children and their parents.

'Children's' is the possessive form; the plural noun is 'children'. Using 'children' fixes the singular/plural and possessive misuse.

× I love the children's.

✓ I love the children.

Again, 'children's' is a possessive form; to express affection for them use the plural noun 'children' without apostrophe.

× Children's are laughing and I love them.

✓ The children are laughing and I love them.

Remove possessive apostrophe and add auxiliary 'are' before present participle 'laughing'. Use 'the children' to specify the group.

× Yes, I want to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It matches the present desire.

× In my city there are many buildings, so many buildings.

✓ In my city there are many buildings, so many that it feels crowded.

Repeating 'so many buildings' is redundant. Improve clarity by completing the 'so' clause: 'so many that it feels crowded'.

× Make me a little tired so I want to see more parks.

✓ They make me a little tired, so I want to see more parks.

Subject is missing; 'Make me' should be 'They make me' referring to buildings. Also add a comma before 'so' linking the cause and effect.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

Question is correct; no grammatical correction needed.

× I want to go to Barcelona Parks because I went Barcelona Parks in last year.

✓ I want to go to parks in Barcelona because I went to Barcelona last year.

Use 'went to' with a place (past tense). 'In last year' is incorrect; use 'last year'. 'Barcelona Parks' is awkward—use 'parks in Barcelona'.

× It was so great.

✓ It was so great.

Sentence is correct past tense describing prior experience.

× There are fresh air and green grass, so I want to go there.

✓ There is fresh air and green grass, so I want to go there.

'Air' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is'. 'Green grass' can remain as a noun phrase; using singular 'is' correctly agrees with the uncountable noun.