Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatical, and include a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Connect ideas with a short linking phrase (e.g., “because” or “and”).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they made me feel relaxed and safe. I often went with my grandfather, and we would walk around the lake and feed the ducks, which was my favorite part.

제안: Answer directly with present simple for habits, include one or two specific activities and a linking phrase. Correct subject-verb errors and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks these days because they help me relax. I usually go with my friends to chat and play sports like cricket, and sometimes we have picnics on the grass.

제안: Give a direct opinion and one clear reason with a specific detail. Avoid repeating the same idea and fix grammar (use conditional phrasing). Use linking words like “because” or “so” once.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it is very large and many neighborhoods lack green spaces. More parks would make it easier for families and students to relax without traveling far.

제안: Be specific about which park or place you mean and use future tense correctly. State one clear plan or dream and provide a brief reason. Avoid repeating words and ensure the sentence is coherent.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the parks in Shimla in the future because of their mountain views and cool climate. I dream of walking among pine trees there and visiting well-known gardens like the Ridge and Himalayan Botanical Garden.

× Yes, I was love to going back in my childhood because I I was feel very relaxed and comfortable, comfortable and I always go with my grandfather.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks in my childhood because I felt very relaxed and comfortable, and I always went with my grandfather.

Errors: 'was love' is incorrect use of verb and tense (should be simple past 'loved'); 'to going' is wrong verb + -ing combination after 'loved' (use gerund 'going' without 'to'); duplicate 'I' and repeated 'comfortable' are mistakes; 'I was feel' mixes past continuous and simple past incorrectly (use 'felt'); 'I always go' should be past tense 'I always went' to match time frame. Suggestion: Use simple past for habits in the past and correct verb forms: subject + past verb, and avoid extra words or duplicates.

× Yes, nowadays I'm going to park with my friends. I mostly spend time with park because I feel very relaxed and I am talking with my friends. I and play some Crick, play some sports like cricket and more.

✓ Yes, nowadays I go to the park with my friends. I mostly spend time at the park because I feel very relaxed, and I talk with my friends. I also play sports like cricket.

Errors: 'I'm going to park' suggests a temporary action; for habitual actions use simple present 'I go'. Incorrect preposition 'with park' should be 'at the park'. 'I am talking' should be simple present 'I talk' for routines. 'I and play' has wrong word order and missing conjunction; 'Crick' is misspelling of 'cricket'. Suggestion: Use simple present for regular activities, correct prepositions ('to the park' for movement, 'at the park' for location), fix word order and spelling, and use 'also' to add activities.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city because there are many parks available in my city because my city is a very big, so that's why I love to see more parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because my city is very big and needs more green spaces.

Errors: Repetition ('in my city' twice) and awkward phrasing; 'available in my city because my city is a very big' has article and adjective order issues ('a very big city' or 'very big' without 'a'). 'Like to see' is acceptable but 'would like to see' is more natural for expressing preference. Suggestion: Combine ideas to avoid repetition, use correct noun phrase order ('a very big city') and use a concise reason ('needs more green spaces').

× Yes, I think I am going to Shimla. There are many parks. My dream I will go to the I will want to go on then parks in my future.

✓ Yes, I think I will go to Shimla. There are many parks there. It is my dream to visit those parks in the future.

Errors: 'I am going to Shimla' could be present continuous implying planned trip; 'I think I will go' is clearer for future intention. 'My dream I will go to the I will want to go on then parks in my future' is ungrammatical: wrong word order, unnecessary auxiliaries, wrong prepositions. Use 'It is my dream to visit those parks in the future.' Suggestion: Use 'will' for predictions or intentions, convert noun phrases into infinitive ('to visit'), and place phrases in correct order. Avoid redundant auxiliaries and incorrect prepositions.