Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and plural forms, and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played badminton and traditional Nepali games with my childhood friends, and we would also run and exercise together. These activities helped me stay active and made my weekends fun.

제안: Give a direct answer and explain briefly with clear reasons. Use present perfect/simple present to describe current habits. Remove hesitation words and unclear phrases, and organize ideas with linking words (for example, because, but, so).

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I don’t visit them often because my friends and I are busy studying. However, when I have free time I try to go for a walk in a nearby park to relax and exercise.

제안: Answer directly and use clear comparisons or descriptions. Correct sentence structure and use linking words to list features (for example, there is/there are, and, additionally). Be specific about what you want to see more of and why.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. My hometown has one large park with football, badminton and volleyball courts, but other areas lack green spaces. More parks would give people places to exercise and relax.

제안: State a clear intention and give a brief reason or memory. Use correct tense when talking about the past and future, and avoid repeating ideas. Use linking words like because or since to explain why you want to visit.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to visit an amusement park again in the future. I went to one when I was eight and enjoyed the rides and swimming, so I’d like to go back to relive those memories and try new attractions.

× Yes of course, because they what I was a child, I was go park and play some games with my childhood friend such badminton and exercise and playing speaking and Nepali games also.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I would go to parks and play games with my childhood friends, such as badminton, exercise, and Nepali games.

This sentence has multiple structure and verb form problems (Grammar problem type ID 26). The speaker uses 'they what I was a child' instead of a clause indicating time; verbs are in incorrect forms ('I was go park') and plurals are inconsistent ('friend' should be 'friends'). Suggestion: start with a time clause 'When I was a child', use the past habitual 'would go' or 'used to go', use 'go to parks' (include preposition 'to'), pluralize 'friends', and use 'such as' before examples. Also separate into clearer sentences with commas.

× Yeah, of course I like to go park uh, but I was uh, not going uh anywhere park because my friend also are a focus, focus on history and I also, uh make better future, uh, for my bright future. And then I'm.

✓ Yes, of course I like to go to parks, but I do not go to parks now because my friends are focusing on their studies and I am also trying to build a better future.

Primary issues are incorrect tense and subject-verb agreement (Grammar problem type ID 6 for tense and ID 27 for agreement). The speaker mixes past tense 'was' with present meaning and uses 'are a focus' incorrectly. Suggestions: use present simple 'I like', 'I do not go' for habitual present negative, use 'go to parks' with preposition 'to', use 'my friends are focusing on their studies' and 'I am trying' or 'I am also working to build a better future'. Remove filler words and incomplete fragment 'And then I'm.'

× Dear has no parking park in my uh city, uh, my hometown have uh city in my hometown have a park and there was a football playground and badminton playground, volleyball playground. There was such a many playground.

✓ There are not many parks in my city. In my hometown there is a park that has a football field, a badminton court, and a volleyball court. There were many playgrounds.

This contains article and number issues (Grammar problem type ID 22) and sentence structure problems (ID 26). 'Dear has no parking park' is nonsensical; use 'There are not many parks' or 'There are no parks'. Use 'a park' with articles before singular nouns, and use correct nouns: 'football field', 'badminton court', 'volleyball court'. Use plural 'playgrounds' appropriately and correct 'such a many' to 'there were many'. Break into clearer sentences.

× Yeah, definitely I will visit amusement park in future. When I was uh, eight years old, I was going, uh, amusement park and I also go one more time and enjoy some games and swimming, some enjoyable for.

✓ Yes, I will definitely visit an amusement park in the future. When I was eight years old, I went to an amusement park and I would like to go again to enjoy the rides and swimming.

This has future and past tense misuse and article errors (Grammar problem type IDs 7 and 5 and 22). Use 'visit an amusement park' with the indefinite article. For past experience, use simple past 'I went' rather than 'I was going'. For intention, 'I would like to go again' or 'I want to go again' is clearer. Replace vague 'enjoy some games and swimming, some enjoyable for' with 'enjoy the rides and swimming'. Keep tense consistency and clear vocabulary.