Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and unclear words (e.g., 'the Lord'), correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and keep to 3–4 concise sentences with specific details about memories. In English (Bangladesh): "Avoid fillers like 'uh' and unclear phrases. Say complete, grammatically correct sentences, mention one or two specific memories and use linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'also')."

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and friends, and we enjoyed the fresh air and green trees. For instance, we used to have picnics and play hide-and-seek near the big banyan tree, which was very memorable.

제안: Make a clear, direct topic sentence and avoid repetition (‘I prefer’ twice). Fix grammar and article use (say 'the park' or 'parks'), and give one specific example of how parks help your mental health. In English (Bangladesh): "Say one clear reason and one short example. Avoid repeating words and check articles (a/the). Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so'."

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because they give me fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, when I feel stressed after work, I walk in the park for 30 minutes and feel calmer and more focused.

제안: Answer directly and use correct plural/singular forms and articles ('more parks', 'the city'). Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'so') and provide a specific benefit or example rather than general statements. In English (Bangladesh): "Use correct forms and be specific: mention one clear group and one clear benefit, with a linking word to connect ideas."

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because parks encourage exercise for older people and give children a safe place to play. For example, a new park with walking paths and playgrounds would help families spend time together and improve community health.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence, correct adjectives ('friendly'), and fix word order and extra words ('as and my friend as well'). Give a specific detail about the park and a short plan (when or who). In English (Bangladesh): "Be specific: name or describe one feature of the park and say when or with whom you will go. Avoid repetition and check adjective forms."

예시: Yes, I plan to visit a large park near my city next month because I heard it has a beautiful lake and many flower gardens. I will go there with my family and a close friend to have a picnic and take photos.

× I used to go to park with my parents and friends.

✓ I used to go to the park with my parents and friends.

Incorrect or missing article before a singular countable noun; in English, 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific or familiar place. Use 'the park' to sound natural.

× Uh, sometimes we enjoyed the Lord, the natural beauty of park, the fresh air as well.

✓ Uh, sometimes we enjoyed the lovely natural beauty of the park and the fresh air as well.

Word choice and word order are incorrect: 'Lord' is incorrect word here; 'lovely' or 'pleasant' fits. Also 'park' needs the article 'the' and adjectives should come before the noun in the correct order.

× I can't remember that memorable time.

✓ I can still remember those memorable times.

Tense and meaning mismatch: student likely intends to state they remember past experiences. 'Can't' contradicts 'memorable' so change to present ability 'can still remember' and pluralize 'times' for general past experiences.

× Yeah, it's still I prefer to go to park because park provides fresh air and the charming environment is helpful for my mental health.

✓ Yeah, I still prefer to go to the park because the park provides fresh air and a pleasant environment that is helpful for my mental health.

Awkward word order 'it's still I prefer' should be 'I still prefer'. 'Park' needs 'the' and 'charming environment' needs an article and more natural adjective 'pleasant'. Also clarify clause order for readability.

× When I feel stressed or exhausted, I I prefer to go to park and enjoy a quality time there.

✓ When I feel stressed or exhausted, I prefer to go to the park and enjoy quality time there.

Duplicate 'I I' is a typo; 'go to park' needs 'the park'. 'Enjoy a quality time' is unidiomatic — use 'enjoy quality time' without 'a'.

× It helps me to improve myself.

✓ It helps me to relax and improve my well-being.

'Improve myself' is vague and slightly unnatural in this context; provide a clearer collocation like 'improve my well-being' or 'relax'. Keep verbs and meaning appropriate to context.

× Yeah, I would like to see more park in my city because whenever city establishes more park, it will help to maintain physical health for older people and children can play there and they can enjoy a quality time, which will help them to build up their mental health as well as physical health.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in my city because when the city establishes more parks, it will help maintain physical health for older people, and children can play there and enjoy quality time, which will help build their mental as well as physical health.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Include definite article 'the city'. Remove unnecessary 'to' in 'help maintain'. Use 'enjoy quality time' rather than 'enjoy a quality time'. Improve sentence structure for clarity.

× Yeah, I am planning to visit a park near my city.

✓ Yeah, I am planning to visit a park near my city.

Sentence is grammatically fine for future plans; no correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I heard that the park is very beautiful and the environment is friend.

✓ I heard that the park is very beautiful and the environment is friendly.

Wrong word 'friend' (noun) used instead of adjective 'friendly'. Use correct adjective to describe environment.

× The environment is friendly so I'm planning to visit there with my family as and my friend as well.

✓ The environment is friendly, so I'm planning to visit there with my family and my friend as well.

Unnecessary word 'as' and awkward pronoun grouping. Remove 'as' and use parallel structure 'with my family and my friend'. Ensure comma before 'so' for clarity.