Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically consistent, concise and give clear supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific activities or memories using linking words. Avoid short fragments and repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my family often went there on Sundays to pray near the big oak tree, and I also played soccer with neighborhood friends. Those visits were special because they combined quiet time with fun play.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and grammar. Provide a reason with a linking word (because/so) and a specific example. Keep it to one or two supporting sentences and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I go there regularly because they have scheduled exercise classes and community events that help me relax and stay active.

제안: Give a clear opinion with a concise reason and a specific detail. Use linking words like ‘‘because’’ and avoid repetition. Explain what makes having many parks inconvenient, or suggest an alternative.

예시: No, I don't think we need more parks because our city already has many small parks that are poorly maintained. It would be better to improve existing parks by adding benches and lighting so they are safer and more useful.

제안: Be specific about what attracts you to that park and use fuller sentences. Mention one or two features you want to see or activities you plan to do, using linking words to expand briefly.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the park in Yamuna Superfecta because I have heard it has beautiful riverside views and a large botanical garden. I would like to walk along the river and take photos of the flowers when I go.

× I like going to the park or the church.

✓ I liked going to the park or the church.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present simple 'like' which mismatches context. Change to past simple 'liked' to match past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when describing habitual past actions (I liked, I used to).

× So when I was a child I usually go to park to pray.

✓ So when I was a child I usually went to the park to pray.

The sentence sets a past time frame 'when I was a child' but uses present tense 'go'. This is a tense consistency error. Also missing article before 'park'. Use past simple 'went' and include 'the'.

× Soccer.

✓ I also played soccer.

Single word 'Soccer.' is a fragment without a verb or subject. To be a complete sentence, add subject and verb: 'I also played soccer.' This matches past context and clarifies meaning.

× Oh yes I do alright going to parks now so because so there is many scheduled right?

✓ Oh yes, I do enjoy going to parks now because there are many scheduled events, right?

Multiple issues: original mixes fillers and wrong tense/structure. 'There is many' is incorrect with plural 'many' (see subject-verb agreement) and 'scheduled' needs a noun like 'events'. Correct to present simple 'I do enjoy' and 'there are many scheduled events'. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× So because so there is many parks in my city so.

✓ Because there are many parks in my city.

'There is' is singular but 'many parks' is plural — subject-verb agreement error. Use 'there are' with plural nouns. Also remove redundant fillers 'so because so'.

× It is very inconvenient.

✓ They are very inconvenient.

Referring to 'parks' (plural), the pronoun and verb must be plural: 'They are'. Using 'It is' incorrectly refers to a singular noun. Use plural pronoun and verb to match antecedent.

× I'd like to go to park in Yamuna Superfecta, so that's very awesome.

✓ I'd like to go to the park in Yamuna Superfecta; that sounds great.

'Go to park' is missing the definite article 'the' before a specific place. Also 'so that's very awesome' is informal and awkward; 'that sounds great' is a more natural response. Ensure article usage for specific places and use appropriate collocation.