Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, give a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid tense and article errors and unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I often played soccer there with my friends every weekend, and we sometimes had small tournaments, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence, reduce filler (e.g., “uh, to be honest”), and combine reasons with linking words. Provide a specific example of activities you do at home to support your point.

예시: I don't go to parks much these days because I'm more of a homebody. For instance, I prefer staying in to play video games or watch films online, so I rarely feel motivated to go outside.

제안: Give a full sentence as the reason instead of starting with 'Because', use linking words to connect ideas, and add a specific example of how parks would help you relax.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would provide peaceful places to relax. For example, I could go for a short walk or sit by a pond to unwind after a stressful day at work.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid short fragments and vague claims, and give specific reasons and an example of a national park you want to visit. Correct article and plural agreement errors.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit national parks in the future because they offer stunning natural scenery and outdoor activities. For instance, I hope to visit Yellowstone National Park to see the geysers and go hiking through its trails.

× Yeah, I really into going to parks when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I was really into going to parks when I was a child.

Missing verb 'was' causes sentence structure and verb tense error (present vs past). Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: include the appropriate form of 'be' for past continuous/stative 'be' ('was/were').

× I can play soccer at the parks with my friends.

✓ I could play soccer at parks with my friends.

The modal tense should match past reference: 'can' is present; use past ability 'could'. Also 'at the parks' is awkward—use 'at parks' or 'in the park' for general habitual past. Suggestion: use 'could' and choose singular/plural preposition phrasing appropriately.

× Uh, to be honest, I don't really like going to parks now.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I don't really like going to parks now.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses present simple to express current preference. (Included only for completeness; no change.)

× Sometimes I like to play games in my home.

✓ Sometimes I like to play games at home.

'In my home' is grammatically acceptable but unnatural here; 'at home' is the idiomatic prepositional phrase. Also 'my' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions ('at home').

× Because sometimes I need to relax, so I need to go.

✓ Sometimes I need to relax, so I need to go.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' and also using 'so' creates a fragment/ redundancy. Remove 'Because' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid using both subordinating 'because' and coordinating 'so' together.

× I want to go national parks in the future.

✓ I want to go to national parks in the future.

Missing preposition 'to' before destination and plural noun needs 'to'. Also could use 'the national parks' if referring to specific parks. Suggestion: include 'to' and consider adding 'the' if specific.

× Because I can.

✓ Because I can.

This short reply is grammatically possible but vague. No verb agreement error; however as an answer it is incomplete logically. Suggestion: expand to 'Because I can visit them' or 'Because I can travel to them' for clarity.

× The national parks is really good in every country.

✓ National parks are really good in every country.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'national parks' is plural and must take plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Also 'the' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural verb 'are' and omit 'the' for general statements.