Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答需更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。避免重复（如 “healthy” 与 “good for our health” 表述重复），并使用一至两句补充具体细节（什么时候去、谁陪伴、印象深刻的活动等）。注意语法小错误（应为 “near my community” 或 “near my neighbourhood”）。

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park near my community when I was a child. I often jogged there in the mornings with my friends, which made me feel energetic and happy.

제안: 回答应更流畅并用正确的句型表达条件（不要用 “providing that” 口语中过于正式且位置不当），句子要更自然并简洁。建议先给直接回答（Yes/No/It depends），随后用一两句解释并加上连接词（because/so/when）。注意语法（如 ‘a big fan of jogging’ 需改为 ‘a big fan of jogging’ 在谓语位置）。

예시: It depends — I still go to parks when I have free time because I'm a big fan of jogging. But when I'm busy with work or studies, I rarely find the time to visit them.

제안: 回答不够直接，并且有用词和语法问题（如 “parks are healthier” 不合适，‘take advantage to the citizens’ 用法错误）。应先直接表态（Yes/No），然后用具体理由和例子支持，用连词如 ‘because’ 或 ‘for example’。替换不恰当短语为 ‘benefit residents’ 或 ‘be beneficial to citizens’。

예시: Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because they benefit residents' health and provide free spaces for exercise and relaxation. For example, more small parks would make it easier for people to go jogging or walk their dogs nearby.

제안: 回答可以更具体，说明为什么想去该公园（例如有特殊景观、徒步路径或野生动植物），并用连接词使句子更连贯。避免冗余（如 ‘really’ 重复），并用一至两句补充具体计划或期待的活动。

예시: Yes, I'd love to visit the National Park because it has beautiful hiking trails and scenic views. I hope to try a long trail there and take photos of the wildlife.

× Sure, I was really keen on jogging in the park near to my community since it is really healthy and good for our health.

✓ Sure, I was really keen on jogging in the park near my community since it is really healthy and good for our health.

句中短语“near to my community”中“near”为介词，后面直接接名词或代词，不需要“to”。建议去掉“to”，改为“near my community”。

× Well, it depends, providing that I have leisure time and a big fan of jogging. However, when I am busy, I will not go to the park.

✓ Well, it depends, provided that I have leisure time and am a big fan of jogging. However, when I am busy, I do not go to the park.

原句中“providing that I have leisure time and a big fan of jogging”结构混乱：一是连词应为“provided that”（或“providing that”也可，但后接完整从句），二是“and a big fan of jogging”缺少动词，主语与谓语不匹配；此外第二句使用“一般现在时”更符合习惯表达（描述常态），因此将第二句改为“do not go”。建议在连接两个并列成分时保证每一部分都有谓语动词，时态与语境一致。

× Frankly speaking, many parks are healthier and they can take advantage to the citizens since they can do exercise when they are free.

✓ Frankly speaking, many parks are healthier and they can be advantageous to the citizens since they can exercise when they are free.

原句中短语“take advantage to the citizens”不符合英文用法。正确表达应为“be advantageous to sb.”或“take advantage of sth.”。另外“do exercise”更自然的表达是“exercise”。建议改为“be advantageous to the citizens”并使用“exercise”。

× Sure, I'm really a big fan of jogging, so I would like to take a visit to the National Park since it is really attractive.

✓ Sure, I'm really a big fan of jogging, so I would like to visit the National Park since it is very attractive.

短语“take a visit to”在英语中较为笨拙，通常直接使用“visit”。另外“really attractive”可改为更自然的“very attractive”。建议使用习惯搭配“visit”以使表达更地道。