Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần trực tiếp hơn, ngắn gọn và tự nhiên. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), sau đó nối tiếp bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh diễn đạt lặp lại và lỗi ngữ pháp như “instead of that” hay “to entertain” không phù hợp. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản (for example, so) để mạch lạc.

예시: No, I didn't. There wasn't a park near our house, so my parents usually organized games and activities at home after school. For example, we often played board games or did simple crafts together.

제안: Cần ngắn gọn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (help → helps, study school → studying/ classes). Tránh câu không hoàn chỉnh (“So however, you can see my”). Nên nêu lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ hoặc thói quen cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như because, so, therefore để kết nối ý.

예시: Yes, I do. As a university student I often go to the park daily because it helps me relax and keeps me active after long classes. For example, I usually jog for 30 minutes there and then sit to read.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng nhiều lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (How, on the almost citizens, parts). Nên nói trực tiếp ý kiến với lý do cụ thể và ngắn gọn. Tránh nói quá dài dòng, dùng từ đúng (citizens → residents, parks not parts). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về lợi ích sẽ làm câu thuyết phục hơn.

예시: Yes, I would. Many residents would welcome more parks because they provide space for exercise and relaxation after work. For instance, new parks would allow people to walk their dogs or do group exercises in the evenings.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần trả lời trực tiếp (No, not really) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (save → saves). Có thể bổ sung chi tiết ngắn về lý do thích công viên đó (ví dụ: features, atmosphere). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, nối ý bằng liên từ như because, so.

예시: No, not really. I prefer nearby parks like Tonya Palace because it's close and saves commuting time. I also like it because it's peaceful and has plenty of shade for reading or relaxing.

× Well, certainly no.

✓ Well, certainly not.

The original uses 'no' incorrectly as a response; 'not' is the correct negation in this context. Use 'not' to negate adverbs or to form negative short answers. Example improvement: 'Well, certainly not.'

× Honestly, when I was a child, there was no park nearby my home.

✓ Honestly, when I was a child, there was no park near my home.

The phrase 'nearby my home' is incorrect; 'near' followed by a noun or 'near my home' is correct. 'Nearby' functions as an adverb or adjective and would require 'a park nearby' or 'near my home'. Suggestion: 'there was no park near my home' or 'there was no park nearby.'

× Instead of that, my parents always tried to organize some activities at home for me to entertain after a long day at school.

✓ Instead, my parents always tried to organize activities at home to entertain me after a long day at school.

Word order and verb complements are incorrect. 'Instead of that' is awkward; 'instead' is better. 'To entertain after' should be 'to entertain me after'. Also 'some activities' is unnecessary; 'activities' suffices. Suggest reordering: 'Instead, my parents always tried to organize activities at home to entertain me after a long day at school.'

× Yes, of course, now I am a university student, so I am used to going there every day.

✓ Yes, of course; now I am a university student, so I am used to going there every day.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically; only punctuation and clarity needed. 'Used to' + gerund is correct. Suggest using a semicolon or shorter clauses for clarity: 'Yes, of course; now I am a university student, so I am used to going there every day.'

× This is because this activity help me entertain and stay healthy after a long day study school.

✓ This is because this activity helps me relax and stay healthy after a long day at university.

Subject-verb agreement: 'activity' (singular) requires 'helps' not 'help'. 'Entertain' is incorrect for the student being entertained; 'relax' or 'amuse' fits better. 'After a long day study school' is ungrammatical; use 'after a long day at school' or 'at university'. Suggest: 'This is because this activity helps me relax and stay healthy after a long day at university.'

× So however, you can see my.

✓ So, however, you can see my point.

The fragment 'you can see my' is incomplete; it lacks the noun 'point' or similar. 'So however' is awkward; use 'so' or 'however' alone or 'so, however,' with correct punctuation. Suggest: 'So, however, you can see my point.'

× How Yes, of course.

✓ How? Yes, of course.

Likely the student attempted to say 'How?' or begin with a hesitation. The original 'How Yes' runs together. Insert appropriate punctuation: 'How? Yes, of course.' or simply 'Yes, of course.'

× I think not only me but on the almost citizens would like to see more parts in my city because they can spend their spare time on outdoor activities at the end of the day to relax.

✓ I think not only I but also most citizens would like to see more parks in my city because they can spend their spare time on outdoor activities at the end of the day to relax.

Multiple pronoun and word choice errors: 'not only me but on the almost citizens' should be 'not only I but also most citizens'. 'Parts' should be 'parks'. ''Most' is the correct quantifier, not 'almost'. Also use 'not only I but also' for grammatical structure. Suggest: 'I think not only I but also most citizens would like to see more parks in my city because they can spend their spare time on outdoor activities at the end of the day to relax.'

× Certainly no Honestly, I am reluctant to travel far from my home, so I just go to Tonya Palace near my home because it's nearby and save time on commuting.

✓ Certainly not. Honestly, I am reluctant to travel far from my home, so I just go to Tonya Palace near my home because it is nearby and saves time on commuting.

Use 'not' instead of 'no' for negation in responses. Sentence needs punctuation. 'It's nearby and save time' has subject-verb agreement: 'it saves time'. Suggest splitting into two sentences: 'Certainly not. Honestly, I am reluctant to travel far from my home, so I just go to Tonya Palace near my home because it is nearby and saves time on commuting.'

× From my perspective, it's also convenient and peaceful.

✓ From my perspective, it is also convenient and peaceful.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable; expanded 'it is' is more formal. Grammatically sentence is fine; no article issue. Provided minor stylistic correction for consistency.