Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, and) to connect ideas and correct tense/agreement errors (e.g., 'other children', 'argue' → 'arguments').

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often asked my grandmother to take me there because I enjoyed playing with other children. Sometimes we had small arguments over games, but we always made up quickly and continued playing.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and explain reasons with clearer language and correct grammar. Avoid awkward phrases like 'it might hurt like childish'; instead, say you feel nostalgic or childish in a positive way. Provide one specific detail (e.g., what you do there now) and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'also').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. I feel nostalgic when I sit on a bench or use the swings, and I often bring a book or meet friends there. Because of those memories, parks remain a special place for me.

제안: Answer the question directly with a clear opinion and give a specific reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'enough parks', 'I often see many children') and avoid vague endings like 'because I think.' Use a linking phrase to explain why you feel that way (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

예시: No, I don't think we need many more parks because there are already enough in my city. I often see children playing and families gathering in the existing parks, which shows they serve the community well. However, I would support improving facilities in some parks, such as adding better playground equipment.

제안: Give a concise, coherent answer with correct grammar and word order. State the specific place you want to visit and a clear reason. Avoid fragmented phrases and filler words. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so') and provide one detail about what you want to do there.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Disneyland in California because there isn't one in Canada. I want to experience the rides and see the shows with friends or family, and take lots of photos to remember the trip.

× I remember when I was a child I always asked my grandma, let her to take me to the park, play with the other child and sometimes I remember I have some argue with them.

✓ I remember when I was a child I always asked my grandma to take me to the park, to play with the other children, and sometimes I remember I had some arguments with them.

Errors: incorrect use of 'let her to take' (should use 'asked...to' for requesting), singular 'child' should be plural 'children' when referring to more than one, and 'I have some argue' is incorrect verb/noun form and tense. Suggestions: use 'asked my grandma to take me' for requests, use plural nouns when appropriate, and use past tense 'had some arguments' with correct noun 'arguments'.

× Yes I do, it might hurt like childish but I still like going to park because there have all my childhood memory and I like playing swings too.

✓ Yes I do, it might sound childish but I still like going to the park because it holds all my childhood memories and I like playing on the swings too.

Errors: 'hurt like childish' is unnatural; use 'sound childish'. 'going to park' needs definite article 'the park'. 'there have all my childhood memory' is wrong tense and structure; use 'it holds all my childhood memories'. 'playing swings' needs preposition 'playing on the swings' and plural 'memories'. Suggestions: choose natural collocations (sound childish), include articles with specific places, use correct verbs for possession (hold) and pluralize countable nouns.

× Actually, I think there's enough park in my city. I always saw many children play in the park. I would feel like so touching because I think.

✓ Actually, I think there are enough parks in my city. I often see many children playing in the park. I would feel very touched because I think it's nice.

Errors: 'there's enough park' incorrect number and article—use plural 'parks' with 'there are'. 'I always saw' wrong tense; present habitual needs 'I often see'. 'many children play' needs gerund 'playing'. 'I would feel like so touching' is ungrammatical; use 'I feel very touched' or 'I would feel very touched' and complete the clause. Suggestions: match singular/plural with 'there is/are', use present tense for habits, use gerunds for ongoing actions, and use appropriate adjective 'touched' rather than 'touching'.

× Yeah, like Disneyland. I really want to go to Disneyland for sure, 'cause there's no Disneyland in Canada, so I wanna go California. To. Play Yeah.

✓ Yeah, like Disneyland. I really want to go to Disneyland for sure, because there is no Disneyland in Canada, so I want to go to California to play.

Errors: informal contractions (''cause', 'wanna'), missing preposition 'to' before 'California', fragmented sentence 'To. Play'. Suggestions: use 'because' in formal speech, 'want to' instead of 'wanna', include 'to' with place 'go to California', and keep infinitive phrase together 'to play'.