Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two brief supporting details. Avoid incorrect phrasing like “I wasn't very like.” Use linking words if you add reasons.

예시: Not really. I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child because I preferred indoor activities like reading and playing games.

제안: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Begin with a clear short answer, then expand with one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”). Avoid repetition (‘at the home only’). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I still don’t enjoy going to parks. I prefer staying at home because I like reading and playing video games, which help me relax after a busy day.

제안: Be specific and correct vocabulary. Answer directly, then give two concise, relevant reasons linked logically. Avoid unclear phrases like “as well as the turtle” and repetitive endings. Use precise environmental benefits (e.g., cleaner air, recreational space) and linking words such as “because” and “and”.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would make the city more attractive and provide green space for exercise and relaxation, and they would also improve air quality and support urban wildlife.

제안: Provide a clear, concise answer naming the park and giving specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., “the biggest park in India”), avoid redundancy, and link sentences with words like “because” or “for example.” Mention one or two unique features you want to see.

예시: Yes, I’d like to visit a famous national park in India because it is the largest in the country and has many species. For example, I hope to see tigers and other wildlife and enjoy the natural scenery.

× I wasn't very like.

✓ I didn't really like them.

The original uses 'wasn't very like' which is ungrammatical. The correct simple past negative for 'like' is 'didn't like' (auxiliary did + base verb). Also specify the object ('them' or 'going to parks') for clarity. Use 'really' for emphasis in adverb position before the main verb.

× As I said, I never like going to the parks.

✓ As I said, I never liked going to parks.

The question asked about childhood preference, so past tense 'liked' is required. Also 'parks' should be without the definite article when speaking generally. 'Never' with past simple is 'never liked'.

× I prefer staying home and reading books and playing video games at the home only.

✓ I prefer staying at home, reading books, and playing video games at home only.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'home' for preference expressions. Place adverbs or limiting words ('only') next to the phrase they modify: 'at home only'. Use commas to separate activities in a list. Alternatively omit the first 'home' and keep 'at home' once.

× I think it would improve the overall beauty of my city as well as the turtle, provide us more oxygen and it it'll be great for the environment as well.

✓ I think it would improve the overall beauty of my city, provide us with more oxygen, and be great for the environment as well.

Multiple issues: use parallel structure after 'would' (improve, provide, be). 'Provide us more oxygen' needs the preposition 'with' ('provide us with more oxygen'). Remove redundant words ('it it'll') and keep verbs parallel. 'As well as the turtle' is unclear—likely meant 'and the wildlife' or omit.

× Yes, I would like to visit national parks often another time.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit national parks again in the future, perhaps more often.

'Another time' is awkward; use 'again in the future'. Place adverbial phrases in natural positions: 'again in the future' or 'more often in the future'.

× This is the biggest park in the entire India and it has a variety of species in there.

✓ This is the biggest park in all of India, and it has a variety of species.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before country names like 'India'. Use 'in all of India' or 'in India'. Remove the redundant 'in there' and end with 'species'.

× I would love to see the tigers as it is as a National Park is only famous for the tigers.

✓ I would love to see the tigers because this national park is famous for them.

Original has faulty clause structure and repetition. Use 'because' to give reason, 'this national park' as subject, and 'famous for them' (pronoun 'them' refers to tigers). Avoid unnecessary capitalization of 'National Park' unless part of proper name.