Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. For example, say where you lived and how that affected visiting parks, and limit yourself to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I liked the idea of going to parks as a child. However, I grew up in a small village in Taiwan where there were no nearby parks, so I rarely visited them.

제안: Answer directly and use correct verb forms. Give one clear reason and a brief supporting detail, using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Avoid fillers and repetition.

예시: I do like parks, but I rarely go now because my job is very busy. As a result, I usually visit a park only once or twice a year when I have time off.

제안: Provide a clear opinion followed by specific explanation. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'although' and correct nouns/adjectives (e.g., 'small' not 'not too small'). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the existing parks are small and crowded. More parks would give people more space for exercise and relaxation.

제안: Give a specific plan or preference and explain why, using clear vocabulary. Replace vague phrases with concrete reasons (e.g., fresh air, exercise). Use 2–3 concise sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, if I get the time I would like to visit the larger city parks near the river. I want to go because they have walking paths and fresh air, which are good for my health and mood.

× Colonel which is Taiwan, yes, I like going Park.

✓ I am from Taiwan, and yes, I liked going to parks.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It mixes 'Colonel' (incorrect word) and wrong word order. Change 'Colonel which is Taiwan' to 'I am from Taiwan' for clarity. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'as a child' context and plural 'parks' and include the preposition 'to' before 'parks'.

× And when was the child but were no park because I was living in the village in the no, no, no park nearby.

✓ When I was a child there were no parks because I lived in a village and there were no parks nearby.

The sentence has incorrect word order and tense forms. Use 'When I was a child' for time expression, 'there were no parks' for existence (plural), and 'I lived' as simple past. Remove repetitions and incorrect insertions for clarity.

× So I haven't joined to going to the park.

✓ So I did not go to the park.

'Join to going' is incorrect. Use simple past 'did not go' to describe a past habit that did not happen. 'Haven't joined' is inappropriate for this context. Also avoid 'to' after 'joined' here.

× No, no, no, because my work is too busy and I have no time to go to park.

✓ No, because my work is too busy and I have no time to go to the park.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park' is required when speaking about going to a specific place in general. Tense and verbs are fine; just add 'the'.

× Every year I just want went to the park just more than once and and no, no, no more time to to visit the park.

✓ Each year I only went to the park once or a little more, and I did not have time to visit it more often.

Mixes present 'want' with past 'went'. Use past tense 'went' consistently for past habitual actions and rephrase 'just more than once' to 'once or a little more'. Remove duplicate words and add 'did not have' for past negation.

× MMM in Malima city never.

✓ In my city, Malima, there are not many parks.

The original lacks a verb and clear structure. Provide a complete sentence with a subject and verb: 'there are not many parks' to express scarcity.

× There was some parks parks nearby but not too small and.

✓ There were some parks nearby, but they were small.

'There was' should be 'There were' to match plural 'parks'. Remove duplicate 'parks' and rephrase 'not too small' which contradicts; likely intended 'they were small'.

× Yeah, you have a chance and time. I will go to you.

✓ If I have the time and the chance, I will go there.

'You have a chance and time' is addressed to the listener incorrectly. Use conditional 'If I have the time and the chance' and 'go there' instead of 'go to you'.

× I will go to any park I want to.

✓ I will go to any park I want to visit.

Add 'visit' for a complete verb phrase; otherwise sentence is understandable but awkward. Maintain future tense 'will'.

× Because maybe because the park always sometimes have the floors and and the flat and the air is so flash and it's good at my health.

✓ Because parks sometimes have flat lawns and fresh air, which is good for my health.

Multiple issues: unnecessary repetition 'because maybe because', incorrect noun 'floors' instead of 'lawns', singular/plural agreement 'park...have' should be 'parks sometimes have', 'the flat' unclear so use 'flat lawns', and 'flash' incorrect for 'fresh'. Use 'good for my health' rather than 'good at my health'.