Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use past tense and a clear topic sentence; avoid redundancy and add a specific detail. Keep it within 1–4 sentences. For example, start with a direct past-tense sentence, then add one specific memory or reason using a linking word.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I often played football there with my neighbours. For example, every Saturday afternoon we would meet by the big oak tree and play until it got dark, which made those weekends very memorable.

제안: Use present tense correctly and check grammar (subject–verb agreement). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific reason and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks as an adult because they help me relax and clear my head. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk there after work, which helps me feel less stressed and more focused.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition (watch duplicated words). Use a clear reason and a specific example of how more parks would help, with a linking word to show consequence or purpose.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would provide more places for people to relax and socialise. For example, if there were more small neighbourhood parks, I could meet friends nearby for afternoon chats without travelling far.

제안: Answer directly about future intention using will or would like to, correct articles and word choice (e.g., 'the nearby area' → 'the nearby parks'), and give one or two specific attractions you want to visit. Use a linking word to add a detail.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the large central park near my neighbourhood because it has a lake and several walking trails. For instance, I plan to go there next month to try the new cycling path and enjoy a picnic with friends.

× I do like to go to parks as a child because I usually hang out with my friends there.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because I usually hung out with my friends there.

The original sentence uses present tense 'do like' and 'usually hang out' but refers to a past time 'as a child.' Use past tense verbs 'liked' and 'hung out' to match the time reference. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time adverbial (as a child -> past tense).

× I do like to go to parks now even though I'm an adult because it usually calm my mind.

✓ I do like going to parks now even though I'm an adult because they usually calm my mind.

Two issues: 'do like' is acceptable for emphasis in present, but 'to go' is better as 'going' for natural phrasing (verb + -ing form). The pronoun 'it' refers to 'parks' (plural), so use 'they' and plural verb 'calm.' Suggestion: use 'going' after 'like' and make pronoun/verb agree with plural noun.

× I would like to see more parks in my city because it it will help me to have more leisure time while trying to communicate with others.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because they will help me have more leisure time while I communicate with others.

Errors: repeated 'it it' and incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'parks' (use 'they'). 'Help me to have' is acceptable but 'help me have' is more natural. 'While trying to communicate with others' lacks a clear subject; add 'I' to show who is trying. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, correct pronoun agreement, and include subject for the subordinate clause.

× I like to see the parks in my the nearby area in my city as it is quite big and popular.

✓ I would like to visit the parks in the nearby area of my city because it is quite big and popular.

Mismatch of tense/intent: question asked about future plans, so 'would like to' or 'want to' is appropriate rather than simple present 'like to see.' Remove the extra 'the' in 'my the nearby.' Use 'visit' for going to a place. 'Nearby area in my city' -> 'nearby area of my city.' 'It' referring to the area is fine. Suggestion: choose a modal ('would like') for future intention, fix article order and preposition use.

× There are lots of enjoyments there.

✓ There are lots of enjoyable activities there.

'Enjoyments' is not a natural countable noun in this context. Use 'enjoyable activities' or 'many enjoyable things' to express attractions. 'Lots of' is acceptable; pair it with a plural noun phrase. Suggestion: replace awkward noun with natural collocation 'enjoyable activities'.