Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ lặp, và thiếu chi tiết cụ thể. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi thì quá khứ (liked), dùng cấu trúc câu đầy đủ, tránh lặp từ, và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: trò chơi bạn chơi, cảm xúc). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu và dùng liên từ khi thêm thông tin.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends to play tag and fly kites, which made me very happy. The open space and playground equipment were perfect for running around. I particularly remember feeling excited on sunny afternoons.

제안: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có một vài lỗi về mạo từ, thì và trật tự từ. Nên dùng mạo từ 'the park' hoặc 'parks', sửa 'to the run' thành 'to run', và dùng liên từ để nối ý (e.g., because, and). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm trong công viên để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

예시: Yes, I still like visiting the park after busy days because it helps me relax. Sometimes I go there to run or walk while enjoying the flowers and fresh air. I especially enjoy visiting in spring and autumn when the weather is mild and the scenery is beautiful.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng ngôn ngữ lóng và cấu trúc bị lỗi, nhiều từ bị lặp và thiếu cụm từ hợp lệ. Nên nói rõ lý do vì sao cần nhiều công viên hơn (ví dụ: không gian xanh, giảm ô nhiễm, nơi cho gia đình), dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích rõ ràng sẽ cải thiện điểm.

예시: Absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for people to relax and exercise. More parks would also help reduce air pollution and give families safe places for children to play. For example, a new park near my neighborhood would be ideal for weekend picnics.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu mạch lạc, nhiều chỗ dừng và lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'pub' thay cho 'park'), thì và danh từ số nhiều/số ít sai. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, nêu tên hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn tới, lý do cụ thể và một chi tiết về khi nào hoặc với ai bạn sẽ tới. Giữ cấu trúc rõ ràng trong tối đa 4 câu.

예시: Yes, there is a large city park near my house that I haven't visited yet but would like to. I want to go because it looks peaceful and has wide lawns and walking paths. I plan to visit it next month with my friends to have a picnic and relax.

× Yes, I really like going to the park when I watch dog because it was a fun and sad place to play.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to the park when I was a child and watched dogs because it was a fun place to play.

The student mixes present and past tenses and misuses verbs. Use past tense 'liked' and 'was' to describe childhood. 'Watch dog' is ungrammatical; change to 'watched dogs' or 'watched a dog'. Also 'sad' conflicts with 'fun' so remove 'sad' unless intended. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood memories and use correct verb forms and plural nouns.

× For example, I often when when there with my friends to run around and and.

✓ For example, I often went there with my friends to run around and play.

The sentence has missing verb and repeated words. Use past tense 'went' to match childhood context, and add the verb 'play' to complete the activity. Remove duplicate words. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb and avoid repetition.

× Yes, to be honest I still like visiting park after busy days.

✓ Yes, to be honest I still like visiting parks after busy days.

Countable noun 'park' needs plural 'parks' or an article 'the park'. Present simple 'still like' is fine. Suggestion: use 'visiting parks' for general habit, or 'visiting the park' for a specific place.

× Sometime I go there to the run and walk beside I can see many flower.

✓ Sometimes I go there to run and walk, and I can see many flowers.

Use adverb 'Sometimes' and infinitive 'to run' without 'the'. 'Walk beside' is incorrect; use 'and I can see' to connect clauses. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. Suggestion: place adverbs correctly and match noun number.

× I really like it especially in spring and autumn.

✓ I really like it, especially in spring and autumn.

Add a comma for clarity; preposition use is correct. Suggestion: punctuation improves readability.

× Absolutely, I would like to see more parks in my city because more park it mean mean.

✓ Absolutely, I would like to see more parks in my city because more parks would mean more green space.

Use plural 'parks' and complete the comparative idea: 'would mean'. 'More park it mean mean' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and modal 'would' to express consequence.

× Many relax place and cleaner ***.

✓ There would be more relaxing places and cleaner air.

Original fragment lacks verb and correct noun forms. Use 'There would be' to indicate result, 'relaxing places' for adjective form, and 'cleaner air' to complete idea. Suggestion: form complete clauses and use correct adjective forms.

× MMM maybe yes I'm.

✓ Hmm, maybe, yes I am.

'I'm.' is incomplete in this context; 'I am' should be part of a full sentence. Use interjection 'Hmm' and proper spacing and punctuation. Suggestion: avoid trailing incomplete contractions.

× I would like to visit a big city pub near my house.

✓ I would like to visit a big public park near my house.

'City pub' likely intended 'public park' or 'big park'. 'Pub' is wrong meaning. Also keep infinitive 'to visit' which is correct. Suggestion: choose correct nouns to match meaning.

× I have not visit yet.

✓ I have not visited it yet.

Present perfect requires past participle 'visited'. Add object 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'have/has + past participle' for experiences up to now.

× I like a peaceful place because they are relaxing and I'm.

✓ I like peaceful places because they are relaxing and peaceful.

Pronoun 'they' should refer to plural 'places' so use 'peaceful places'. Ending 'and I'm' is incomplete; replace with 'and I am' or better 'and peaceful'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and finish comparisons or descriptions fully.