Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm không chính xác (ví dụ: "parks are" -> "parks are"; dùng từ không phù hợp như "very boring" lặp lại ý). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về tuổi thơ, thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ chơi trò gì ở công viên) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Ví dụ cụ thể: "When I was a child, I loved going to the park because I enjoyed..."

예시: When I was a child, I loved going to the park because I often played on the swings and ran around with my friends. It was a safe place for us to explore, and I remember the colorful flowers and big trees that made it feel peaceful.

제안: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và đúng trọng tâm nhưng có thể được làm phong phú hơn với lý do và liên từ để nối ý. Nên nói rõ tần suất bằng cách dùng cụm từ tự nhiên (e.g., "once or twice a week") và giải thích vì sao đi ít hơn trước (ví dụ: bận rộn, công viên kém thú vị). Đồng thời đảm bảo tối đa 3-4 câu để giữ tự nhiên.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I only go once or twice a week because I'm usually busy with work. When I go, I like to take a short walk or read on a bench to relax.

제안: Ý chính rõ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác ("makes makes" và "funnier" không phù hợp). Nên dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, nêu lý do cụ thể và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Thay "funnier" bằng "more enjoyable" hoặc "more lively". Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích xã hội hoặc sức khỏe.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would make the city more lively and provide places for families to meet. For example, children could ride bikes safely and parents could relax while watching them.

제안: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng, có lỗi ngữ pháp ("visit to" -> "visit", "in every country" hơi quá rộng), và có cụm từ không hiểu được ("UMM. Seeds and flowers there with their language"). Nên trả lời trực tiếp: nêu một nơi cụ thể muốn đến và lý do, dùng thì tương lai đơn hợp lý và cung cấp chi tiết về những gì muốn thấy. Tránh cụm từ mơ hồ và sửa ngữ pháp.

예시: I would like to visit famous botanical parks abroad, such as Kew Gardens in London, because I enjoy seeing rare plants and colorful flowers. I hope to learn about different plants and their cultural significance when I travel.

× Good. I really like going to park.

✓ Good. I really liked going to parks.

The student omitted the plural or the article. 'Go to park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park' for a specific park or 'going to parks' for parks in general. Also tense should match past context ('Did you like...') so 'liked' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'the' for a specific place or plural form for general habits: 'going to the park' or 'going to parks'.

× Going to parks as a child, but now I don't 'cause nowadays every parks are very boring.

✓ I used to go to parks as a child, but now I don't because nowadays parks are very boring.

The original sentence is a fragment and has multiple errors: missing main verb, incorrect contraction 'cause' informal and spelled, incorrect plural article usage ('every parks' should be 'every park' or just 'parks'). 'Every' requires a singular noun. Also tense contrast requires 'used to' to indicate past habit. Suggestion: Use a full clause for past habits ('I used to go to parks') and 'every park' or simply 'parks are' without 'every'.

× Yes I do, but I go to parks occasionally, just one or two days a week.

✓ Yes, I do, but I go to the park occasionally, just one or two days a week.

When referring to visiting parks as a regular activity on specified days, 'the park' is more natural to indicate going to a park (or parks) as a recurring activity. If intended meaning is many different parks, keeping 'parks' is possible, but the natural collocation is 'go to the park occasionally.' Suggestion: Use commas after 'Yes' and choose definite article when referring to the usual place: 'go to the park occasionally.'

× Yes I would, more parks in my city makes makes it more social and funnier.

✓ Yes, I would. More parks in my city would make it more social and more fun.

Subject-verb agreement: 'more parks' is plural so verb must be plural ('make' not 'makes'). The sentence also repeats 'makes' twice. 'Funnier' is comparative and awkward with 'more'; better phrase is 'more fun.' Using conditional 'would make' matches 'I would' to express desire. Suggestion: Use plural verb form and avoid double comparative: 'would make it more social and more fun.'

× I can see some kids ride their bikes with their friends and some parents with their children.

✓ I can imagine some kids riding their bikes with their friends and some parents with their children.

After expressions like 'can see' in this context, the -ing form is more natural ('seeing'/'riding') or use 'I can see kids ride' might be acceptable in some dialects but 'riding' is clearer. Also 'I can imagine' fits when speaking about a hypothetical improved city. Use gerund after 'see' when indicating an ongoing action: 'see kids riding.' Suggestion: Use gerund form 'riding' to describe the action: 'kids riding their bikes.'

× I will travel and visit to lots of parks in every country so I can see UMM. Seeds and flowers there with their language.

✓ I will travel and visit lots of parks in many countries so I can see seeds and flowers there and learn about their names in different languages.

Incorrect preposition 'visit to' should be 'visit' without 'to'. 'Every country' is too absolute; 'many countries' is more realistic. 'UMM.' and sentence fragmentation indicate hesitation; 'UMM' should be removed. The phrase 'Seeds and flowers there with their language' is ungrammatical—likely means seeing seeds and flowers and learning their names in local languages. Also 'will' is acceptable for future intent. Suggestion: Remove filler sounds, correct verb usage 'visit lots of parks', and clarify the clause about seeds/flowers and languages: 'see seeds and flowers there and learn their names in different languages.'