Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, more natural, and slightly more detailed. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason or memory. Use correct verb forms and articles, and keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go with my family every weekend because playing on the swings and running on the grass made me very happy.

제안: Use natural phrasing and correct articles, and give a specific frequency and brief reason. Connect ideas with a linking word and avoid awkward phrases like “from my perspective.”

예시: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but because I am usually busy with work I only go about once a month. When I do visit, I like to relax and get some fresh air.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid vague expressions like “watch parks” and unclear outcomes such as “gives me confidence and good things.” Explain one clear reason why more parks would be beneficial, using linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For example, more parks would make it easier for people to walk or meet friends nearby.

제안: Be specific about the park and the activities you mean, and avoid fillers like “uh.” Use correct vocabulary (e.g., playgrounds, tree climbing, go-karting) and keep sentences concise. Mention a particular park or type of activity and why you want to try it.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a large recreational park nearby that has playgrounds and adventure activities. For instance, I want to try tree-climbing courses and a family-friendly go-kart track because they seem exciting and fun.

× Yes, I like to go park as a child because it give me happiness.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child because it gave me happiness.

Tense and verb agreement: The speaker refers to a past habitual action, so use past tense 'liked' and 'gave'. Countable noun and article: 'park' needs the article 'the' or 'a' when singular and countable; here 'the park' or 'parks' fits. Also change 'to go park' to 'going to the park' for natural gerund structure.

× From my perspective, nowadays I am busy with my work schedules, so I often go to park every month.

✓ From my perspective, nowadays I am busy with my work schedule, so I often go to the park every month.

Article and noun form: Use singular uncountable 'work schedule' or 'work schedules' consistently; 'work schedule' is more natural. 'Go to park' needs the definite article 'the' for a specific place: 'go to the park'. Adverb and time phrase placement is fine; keep 'every month'.

× Yes, there are many parks in my city and I like to watch parks because it gives me confidence and good things.

✓ Yes, there are many parks in my city, and I like to visit them because they give me confidence and make me feel good.

Verb choice and agreement: 'watch parks' is unnatural; use 'visit them' or 'go to them'. Pronoun and verb agreement: 'parks' is plural, so use 'they give' not 'it gives'. 'Good things' is vague; 'make me feel good' is a clearer, natural expression.

× Yes, in future I want to go park because, uh, there are a lot of playgrounds and many activities like riding a tree, then mounting and racing a car in a garden.

✓ Yes, in the future I want to go to the park because there are a lot of playgrounds and many activities like tree climbing, then riding and racing go-karts in a garden area.

Article and preposition: Use 'in the future' and 'go to the park'. Incorrect verb phrases: 'riding a tree' should be 'tree climbing'. 'Mounting and racing a car in a garden' is awkward and likely inaccurate; use 'riding and racing go-karts' if that is meant. Keep future intention with 'want to' which is correct; clarify activities with correct nouns and gerunds.