Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep your answer concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy (e.g., "recreate its recreation"). Use linking words like "because" or "which" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because it was a place to play and explore. For example, I often climbed trees and played games with friends, which helped me become more independent and cheerful.

제안: Provide a clear main sentence and link reasons with words like "because" or "so." Avoid filler words ("uh") and fix verb agreement. Mention one specific activity you do with your children to make the answer more concrete.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I have two young children and I want them to play outside instead of using gadgets. For example, we usually play ball together and take a 30-minute walk, which is good exercise for all of us.

제안: Answer directly then give one or two clear reasons, using linking words like "because" or "so." Remove hesitations and correct phrasing (e.g., "be part of and advocate for"). Be specific about how parks help (clean air, recreation, cooling urban heat).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe play areas for children and improve air quality. For instance, more green spaces can reduce urban heat and encourage families to spend time outdoors.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and a specific reason or example. Avoid fillers and vague phrases like "a lot of urban and rural structures." Name a particular park or describe what features you want to see (gardens, historical design, family areas).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks in China, such as the Summer Palace in Beijing, because I want to see its historic gardens and lakes. I am also interested in modern urban parks to observe how they combine natural scenery with city design.

× Yes, I enjoyed going to the park when I was a child because aside from its recreate its recreation for me, it also make me independent and happy.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to the park when I was a child because, aside from being recreation for me, it also made me independent and happy.

The phrase 'aside from its recreate its recreation for me' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect word forms; replace with 'aside from being recreation for me' to use the noun 'recreation' correctly. 'Make' should be in the past tense 'made' to agree with 'enjoyed' (past context). Use commas to separate the clause for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, I still like going to parks now, especially that I already have two kids. I love for them to enjoy the uh, parks to avoid gadgets and also I enjoyed walking around is an exercise.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now, especially since I already have two kids. I want them to enjoy the parks to avoid gadgets, and I also enjoy walking around because it is exercise.

Use 'since' instead of 'that' to indicate reason. 'I love for them to enjoy' is awkward; use 'I want them to enjoy' or 'I like them to enjoy'. 'Enjoyed' should be present 'enjoy' to match current habit. 'is an exercise' should be 'because it is exercise' or 'because it is good exercise' for natural English and correct clause linking. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I would like to be part and advocate to have more parks in the city, especially having two young children and it I believe that it will help also the environment, especially now that we are experiencing, umm, climate change, it's best to have more.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a part of and an advocate for having more parks in the city. As a parent of two young children, I also believe this will help the environment, especially now that we are experiencing climate change; it is best to have more parks.

Use 'be a part of' and 'an advocate for' for correct prepositions. 'Advocate to have' is incorrect. Break the long sentence into two for clarity. 'Having two young children' works better rephrased as 'As a parent of two young children'. Remove filler words and fix punctuation. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I'd love to experience the parks at China since they have a lot of, umm, urban and rural structures.

✓ I'd love to visit parks in China since they have many urban and rural parks and interesting landscapes.

Use 'visit parks in China' rather than 'experience the parks at China'—'in' is correct preposition and 'visit' is the natural verb. 'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is appropriate. Clarify 'urban and rural structures' to a more natural noun like 'parks and landscapes' or 'urban and rural areas'. Grammar problem type ID: 9