Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意时态、动词形式和用词准确性，简化并直接回答问题；句子不宜过长，避免重复信息。可以用一到两句开门见山表明态度，然后用一两句具体细节支持。比如把“be busy”“want to go to the box”等错误改正为正确表达，并用连词使叙述流畅。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my friends to play basketball and have picnics, which was a great way to relax after studying.

제안: 注意动词形式和搭配（如“be busy”应为“am busy”）；避免口语填充词如“you know”过多。结构上先直接回答，再用具体活动和原因支持，使用连接词使逻辑清晰。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Because I am often busy with work and study, I use parks to recharge by jogging, exercising, or having picnics with friends, which helps me relax and feel refreshed.

제안: 注意词汇选择与语法（如“quality of air”更常说“air quality”，“environment friendly”应为“environmentally friendly”），避免重复单词；用更具体的理由和例子支持观点，并保持句子简洁。

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. Parks improve air quality and create a peaceful, environmentally friendly atmosphere. They also provide more places for people to relax and exercise.

제안: 避免混乱的时间表达和语法错误（如“When I want to go”应为“In the future I would like to visit”）；注意单复数和冠词（“the National Park”或“a national park”），并把细节组织成清晰的比较句，使用连接词。

예시: In the future I would like to visit a national park. Compared with local parks, national parks are more spacious and often have endangered animals and stunning scenery, such as coastlines and big mountains, which I would love to see.

× Well, I would like to say that I'm quite into going to parks as a child.

✓ Well, I would like to say that I was quite into going to parks as a child.

句子中描述的是“作为一个孩子”的过去经历，应使用一般过去时而不是现在时。原句中使用“I'm”与“as a child”时间不一致。建议将“I'm”改为“I was”。

× You know, when I was a child, I always be busy with my study and I want to go to the box for recreation and I often go there with my friends, even have picnics.

✓ You know, when I was a child, I was always busy with my studies and I wanted to go to the park for recreation, and I often went there with my friends, even having picnics.

此句讲述过去的习惯与动作，应使用过去时态。具体错误包括：1) “always be busy”应为过去时“was always busy”；2) “my study”应为复数或改为“my studies”；3) “I want to go”应为过去“I wanted to go”；4) “the box”可能为误写，应为“the park”；5) 表示经常去某处应使用过去时“went”。建议统一使用过去时并修正词汇。

× We always play basketball game in the parks.

✓ We always played basketball in the parks.

句子谈论过去的习惯，应使用过去时“played”。另外“basketball game”在此处多余，通常说“play basketball”。将时态改为过去并简化名词短语。

× Of course, I still like going to parks now, you know, because I always be busy with my work or study.

✓ Of course, I still like going to parks now, you know, because I am always busy with my work or study.

描述现在的状态应使用现在时态，“always be busy”不是正确的现在时表达，应改为“am always busy”。同时保持现在时以配合“now”。

× So I need to recharge my batteries by going to parks just to go jogging or doing exercise or even have picnics with my friends.

✓ So I need to recharge my batteries by going to parks just to go jogging, do exercise, or even have picnics with my friends.

并列动词结构需形式一致。原句混用了“go jogging”与“doing exercise”；应统一为不定式或动词原形并列。建议使用“go jogging, do exercise, or even have picnics”。

× It's really meaningful.

✓ It's really meaningful.

句子本身语法正确，但“meaningful”可接受。这里没有需要改动的时态问题。

× Of course I want to see more parks in my city.

✓ Of course I want to see more parks in my city.

句子语法正确，表达现在愿望使用现在时“want”是恰当的。无需更改。

× Firstly, parks could improve our quality of air in my city.

✓ Firstly, parks could improve the air quality in my city.

短语“quality of air”顺序不自然，常用搭配为“air quality”。同时加上定冠词“the”更符合英语表达。

× It could create create a more peaceful and environment friendly atmosphere.

✓ It could create a more peaceful and environmentally friendly atmosphere.

错误有两处：重复了“create create”，以及“environment friendly”应为副词变体“environmentally friendly”或形容词短语“environment-friendly”。建议改为“environmentally friendly”。

× Secondly, it could service me more places to relax and unwind for people.

✓ Secondly, it could provide more places for people to relax and unwind.

“service me more places”结构错误，应使用“provide more places for people”。“for people”位置需调整，且“service”在此语境不当。建议使用“provide”。

× When I want to go to the National Park in the future, you know, compared with the local park, National Park is more spacious and has some endangered animals and the views is more stunning than the local park.

✓ When I go to the national park in the future, compared with local parks, the national park is more spacious, has some endangered animals, and the views are more stunning than those of local parks.

多个问题：1) 时间状语“in the future”与从句“When I want to go”搭配不自然，常用“When I go”或“I want to go”替代；2) 专有名词不必首字母大写“national park”除非指特定公园，而句中对比泛指可小写；3) “has some endangered animals and the views is”中“views”为复数应使用“are”；4) 比较对象重复且不清楚，“than the local park”应改为“than those of local parks”。建议统一时态并修正主谓一致与比较结构。

× I want to see the coastlines and that big mountains I really.

✓ I really want to see the coastlines and those big mountains.

原句语序混乱且主谓搭配不当：“I really”的位置应靠近谓语“want”，并且“that big mountains”中“that”与复数“mountains”不匹配，应使用“those”。重组句子使语序和指示代词一致。