Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并修正语法错误，避免模糊不清。先用一句话直接回答问题，然后用1–2句具体说明原因并加上连接词。注意时态与词序，例如用“I didn’t”而不是“I don't think so”来表明过去喜好。

예시: No, I didn’t go to parks much as a child. I spent most of my time at school, so I usually played on the school playground with my friends after classes.

제안: 注意时态与表达清晰性。先直接回答，然后用一两句说明原因并用连接词（because, so）。删除多余重复词（如“in in”）。可以补充具体活动增加细节。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. During my graduate studies, there was a large park near campus, so my classmates and I often went there to relax, walk and have conversations.

제안: 回答需更自然，改用完整句并修正语法错误。先直接回答（Yes/Definitely），然后给出具体理由并用连接词（because, so）说明公园的社会与健康益处。避免句中断和多余重复。

예시: Definitely. I think more parks would benefit all citizens because they provide places to relax, exercise and meet friends, which improves both physical health and community life.

제안: 修正词汇和拼写错误（如“crosses”应为“grass/green areas”），并用更自然的表达方式。先直接回答，然后具体描述想去的公园类型并说明原因或活动。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a lakeside park with large grassy areas. It would be perfect for sitting, having a picnic and enjoying views of the water with friends.

× I don't think so because I lived in school so I'll go to playground with my friends more often.

✓ I don't think so because I lived at school, so I went to the playground with my friends more often.

问题：主谓一致和时态不一致，介词使用不当。 说明：原句中“lived in school”应为表示居住在学校时用介词“at school”；句子前半用过去时“lived”，后半“I'll go”是将来时，与上下文不一致，且缺冠词“the”应置于“playground”前。建议：保持全句过去时，改为“I lived at school, so I went to the playground with my friends more often.”。

× I love going to parks in my graduate time because our school is near a big park and we can enjoy ourselves in in the park.

✓ I loved going to parks during my graduate years because our school was near a big park and we could enjoy ourselves in the park.

问题：时态使用不当和重复词。 说明：原句中“in my graduate time”表达不自然，且如果指过去的读研时期，应使用过去时“loved/was/could”。“in in the park”有重复。建议：使用“during my graduate years”或“when I was a graduate student”，并统一使用过去时态。

× Of course I like it and I think going to parks is. Benefit for to all of our citizens. We can relax here and chat here.

✓ Of course I like it, and I think going to parks is beneficial for all of our citizens. We can relax and chat there.

问题：介词/词形和句子断裂。 说明：原句“is. Benefit for to”结构错误，名词“Benefit”应为形容词“beneficial”，介词短语应为“for all of our citizens”，不能同时用“for to”。另外“We can relax here and chat here”重复“here”，将第二处改为“there”更自然。建议：把句子连贯成一完整句并改正词性和介词使用。

× I want to go to parks near a lake and have large crosses so that we can sit down and have a picnic there.

✓ I want to go to parks near a lake that have large lawns so that we can sit down and have a picnic there.

问题：词汇错误与名词搭配不当。 说明：原句“large crosses”用词错误，可能想说“large grass/lawns/green spaces”。时态“want”用于表达未来愿望是可以的，但需要修正名词为“lawns”或“open spaces”。建议：用“lawns”或“green spaces”替换“crosses”，并保持句子其余部分不变。