Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I loved going to parks as a child."), then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (because/so/for example). Correct vocabulary (e.g. "paddling pool" not "acid in the padding") and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Every Saturday my friends and I would meet to play board games and use the paddling pool. Because the park was safe and spacious, we spent hours running around and having fun.

제안: Answer directly, then give clear reasons and specific details. Use linking words (so, because, and) and correct sentence structure. Mention who you meet and what you do, and finish the sentence logically. Keep it natural and avoid incomplete clauses.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Now I take my baby there every Saturday, and we often meet neighbours and old friends. I like it because the children can play together safely, and it gives me a chance to socialise.

제안: Make a clear opinion statement first, then add 1–2 reasons with specific vocabulary. Avoid filler words (uh) and correct word choice ("parks are good places to relax" instead of "social addictive"). Use linking words (because, therefore) and be concise. Explain why more parks would benefit people’s mental and social well-being.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Parks provide peaceful green spaces where people can relax and reduce stress, and they also offer places for families to socialise and exercise.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific plan or reason and use future tense correctly. Be slightly more descriptive about the park or activities to add detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, of course. From next Saturday I plan to take my baby to the new park near our house because it has a modern playground and a pleasant walking path.

× Yes, I love I'm going to park.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park.

The original mixes present tense 'I love' with a continuous construction 'I'm going' incorrectly. The question asks about childhood, so past tense is required ('loved'). Also use the article 'the' with 'park' when speaking generally about a familiar place. Suggestion: use past simple or 'used to' for habitual past actions (e.g. 'I loved going to the park' or 'I used to go to the park').

× As a child I used to go away every Saturday with my friends to play board games and enjoy the water activities like acid in the padding for because we have some fun running around together.

✓ As a child, I used to go every Saturday with my friends to play board games and enjoy water activities like kayaking and paddleboarding because we had fun running around together.

Several issues: use of 'go away' is wrong for 'go out' or just 'go'; 'water activities like acid in the padding for' is garbled — likely intended 'kayaking and paddleboarding' or similar; tense should be past ('we had fun'). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: choose correct activity names and keep past tense for habitual childhood actions.

× Yes, I have a baby now so every Saturday with my baby and I go to the park, we meet some neighbors and my old friend.

✓ Yes, I have a baby now, so every Saturday my baby and I go to the park; we meet some neighbors and my old friends.

Word order and punctuation needed fixing: put subject before verbs ('my baby and I go'), add comma after introductory clause, and use plural 'friends' if more than one. Also use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: maintain present simple for habitual current actions and correct word order.

× They are there and the children play together, which I enjoy because it.

✓ They are there and the children play together, which I enjoy because it makes me happy.

The clause 'which I enjoy because it' is incomplete and lacks an object or complement. Add a clear result or reason ('it makes me happy') to complete the sentence. Suggestion: ensure subordinate clauses have a clear referent and finish the thought.

× Yes, uh, parking's only four time spending area.

✓ Yes, parks are one of the few places for spending time.

'parking's only four time spending area' is ungrammatical and misuses 'four' and 'parking's'. Likely intended: 'parks are one of the few places to spend time' or 'parks are one of the few recreational spaces'. Use quantifier 'one of the few' and plural 'parks'. Suggestion: use clear quantifiers and correct nouns.

× This is very, uh, social addictive because uh, some people say has just some no need to stress so away Park is very silent green environment to the mind to the.

✓ They are very socially relaxing because some people say there is no need to stress; parks provide a quiet, green environment that is good for the mind.

Many issues: 'social addictive' is incorrect — use 'socially relaxing' or 'socially beneficial'; missing 'there is' in 'some people say has'; 'silent green environment' should be 'quiet, green environment'; end phrase incomplete. Use adjectives in correct order and include necessary verbs. Suggestion: use adverbs for modifying verbs/adjectives ('socially'), include 'there is' when stating existence, and complete the final clause.

× Yes, of course. Umm, every coming Saturday I will go to New Park with my baby.

✓ Yes, of course. From now on, every Saturday I will go to the new park with my baby.

'Every coming Saturday' is awkward; use 'from now on, every Saturday' or 'every coming Saturday' can be 'each coming Saturday' but 'from now on' is clearer. 'New Park' may be a proper name; if not, use 'the new park'. The future tense 'will go' is acceptable for planned future habits but 'will be going' or 'I will go' both work. Suggestion: choose clear time expression and correct article use for park name.