Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add a specific supporting detail (one or two). Use linking words to connect ideas. Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "enjoy nature" not "enjoy the nature").

예시: Yes, I loved visiting parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and explored the gardens with my friends, which made those afternoons very fun and memorable.

제안: Be concise and use clearer language. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Replace vague phrases like "do a lot of thing" with concrete activities. Reduce hesitation words.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and clear my mind. For instance, I go for walks and sometimes read on a bench, which really reduces my stress.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "because") correctly and avoid hesitation. Improve grammar: say "a very busy city" and "it is hard to find space for new parks." Offer a brief suggestion or opinion about what could be done.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, but it is difficult because our city is very crowded and land is scarce. Perhaps the government could convert some vacant lots into small green spaces to make the city greener.

제안: Be specific and avoid informal contractions like "wanna" in the test. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the parks or countries, then give a reason and one detail. Reduce hesitations and unfinished thoughts. If you mention a park by name, state why you want to visit it.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit several parks in the future, for example botanical gardens in Sri Lanka and national parks in Australia, because I enjoy seeing different plants and wildlife. I am especially interested in visiting Mahadevi Park to see its historical monuments and landscaped gardens.

× I did like to go into parks at parks as a child because it is very funny and uh, we can umm, enjoy the nature.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because it was very fun and we could enjoy nature.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'into parks at parks' and awkward verb forms. 'Go into parks' is unnecessary; 'go to parks' or 'going to parks' is natural. Tense: use past 'liked' for childhood. 'Funny' is incorrect for 'enjoyable' so use 'fun'. 'Enjoy the nature' -> 'enjoy nature' (no article). Suggestions: use 'liked going to parks', keep past tense, and omit 'the' before 'nature'.

× Well, to be honest, I still like going to parks, umm, at the moment, uh, mostly because I can relax my mind and uh, do a lot of thing, reduce our stress.

✓ Well, to be honest, I still like going to parks at the moment, mostly because I can relax my mind, do many things, and reduce my stress.

Errors: word order and countability. 'At the moment' fits present tense but was separated awkwardly. 'Do a lot of thing' is uncountable error—use 'do a lot of things' or 'many things'. 'Reduce our stress' mismatches pronoun perspective; student speaks for themselves, so use 'my stress'. Suggestions: keep present tense, use plural 'things', and use consistent pronouns.

× Actually, I would like to see many parks in my city.

✓ Actually, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Error: quantifier usage—'many' is acceptable but 'more' matches the question asking 'see more parks'. Use 'more parks' to express desire for an increased number. Suggestion: use 'more' when comparing current amount to desired amount.

× However, it's a very difficult thing. Our city is very busy area so it can't MMM see many parks.

✓ However, it is difficult because our city is a very busy area, so we cannot have many parks.

Errors: sentence fragments and missing articles. 'It's a very difficult thing' is vague. 'Very busy area' requires an article 'a'. 'it can't see many parks' is ungrammatical—cities don't 'see' parks; use 'we cannot have many parks' or 'there cannot be many parks'. Suggestions: rephrase to 'it is difficult because our city is a very busy area, so we cannot have many parks.'

× That's an interesting question. I wanna go mini parks in Sri Lanka and Australia, so I believe that I can do it in the future.

✓ That's an interesting question. I want to visit national parks in Sri Lanka and Australia, so I believe I can do that in the future.

Errors: informal contraction 'wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. 'Go mini parks' is ungrammatical—likely 'visit national parks' or 'go to many parks'. 'Do it' is vague; use 'do that' or 'visit them'. Suggestions: use 'want to visit', specify 'national parks' or 'many parks', and use 'I can' for future possibility.

× Umm, mostly I wanna go to UMM. We had a Mahadevi park and uh.

✓ Mostly, I want to go to... We had a Mahadevi Park.

Errors: mixing of tenses and informal fillers. 'We had a Mahadevi park' suggests past possession; if referring to a park that exists, say 'We have Mahadevi Park' or 'There was a Mahadevi Park'. Use present 'have' for current existence. 'wanna' should be 'want to'. Suggestions: choose correct tense: 'I want to go to Mahadevi Park' or 'We have Mahadevi Park' depending on meaning.