Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Habla con oraciones más naturales y evita repeticiones; organiza la respuesta con una oración tema seguida de uno o dos detalles específicos (máx. 5 oraciones). Usa conectores simples para mayor coherencia.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. We always went as a family on weekends, which made those outings very special, and I have fond memories of picnics and playing games there.

제안: Evita frases largas y repetitivas; divide la idea en oraciones claras y usa conectores como 'because' o 'and' para relacionar causas y resultados. Añade un ejemplo concreto o frecuencia para especificar.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. Now I usually visit a park on weekends with my partner and our routine walks help us relax.

제안: Responde directamente a la pregunta inicial antes de añadir contexto. Evita muletillas como 'uh' y organiza la idea: primero la respuesta breve, luego la razón y un ejemplo específico.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my hometown, but I currently travel a lot. For example, when I visit a new city I always try to explore its main park to learn about local life.

제안: Sé más específico y evita repetir la misma idea. Da una respuesta directa y añade detalles concretos o una preferencia (tipo de parque o ubicación) para enriquecer la respuesta.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit large botanical gardens in the future. I don't have specific plans yet, but I hope to see famous gardens in Japan or the Royal Botanic Gardens in London.

× Yes, I actually loved to go to a park when I was a child cause usually we were going together with my whole family so it was kind of a weekend activity for us and I remember it with so much love.

✓ Yes, I actually loved going to the park when I was a child because we usually went together with my whole family, so it was kind of a weekend activity for us and I remember it with so much love.

Use of 'loved to go' is acceptable but 'loved going' is more natural with enjoyment verbs (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'to a park' is changed to 'the park' to refer to parks in general as a habitual childhood activity (Article/usage clarity). 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'we were going together' is an awkward progressive for habitual past; use simple past 'we usually went'. Overall, use simple past for repeated past actions and gerund after 'loved'. Suggestion: prefer 'loved + -ing' for habitual enjoyment and use simple past for repeated past actions.

× Yes, sure, I keep enjoying a lot going to the park because as I said, it gives me good memories from the past, but also because as I did it my whole childhood, now is like a normal activity for me on the weekends, even with my new family. So it's something great to do.

✓ Yes, sure, I still enjoy going to the park a lot because, as I said, it gives me good memories from the past, and because I did it my whole childhood, it is now a normal activity for me on the weekends, even with my new family. So it's something great to do.

'keep enjoying a lot going' is ungrammatical: use 'still enjoy going to the park a lot' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'as I did it my whole childhood' is clumsy; 'because I did it my whole childhood' is clearer. 'now is like a normal activity' lacks subject; add 'it is now' to form proper present tense. Use consistent present simple for current habits. Suggestion: use 'still enjoy' for continuing states and ensure sentences have explicit subjects.

× Yes. I actually don't live anymore in my city. I'm traveling the world, so it's a pretty common activity for me to, uh, go to the new parks or to the new cities just to see how they look. And yeah.

✓ Yes. I actually don't live in my city anymore. I'm traveling the world, so it's pretty common for me to go to new parks or new cities just to see how they look.

Word order: 'don't live anymore in my city' is nonstandard; correct is 'don't live in my city anymore' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'it's a pretty common activity for me to, uh, go to the new parks or to the new cities' is wordy; remove filler and articles: 'go to new parks or new cities'. Keep present continuous 'I'm traveling' for ongoing action. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'anymore' after the object and omit unnecessary articles when speaking generally.

× Yes, but I don't have anything planned yet. It's like wherever I go, I go to a new park or but it's not something that I have planned. It's something that happens just in the moment.

✓ Yes, but I don't have anything planned yet. Wherever I go, I visit a new park, but it's not something I plan in advance; it just happens in the moment.

Use of simple present 'I don't have' is fine. However, 'It's like wherever I go, I go to a new park or but it's not something that I have planned' is awkward and repetitive. Use 'wherever I go, I visit a new park' to express habitual present behavior and 'it's not something I plan in advance' to show lack of planning (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'happens just in the moment' is better as 'it just happens in the moment'. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, avoid redundant connectors like 'or but', and use 'visit' for clarity.