Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và cấu trúc câu: trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh câu rời rạc; dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về thói quen trong quá khứ; thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn với từ nối nếu cần.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because they were peaceful and wide. For example, I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which made those afternoons very happy.

제안: Nối câu và hoàn thiện ngữ pháp: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words để kết nối ý và chỉnh động từ để câu đầy đủ; thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để câu thuyết phục hơn.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because walking there helps me relax and clear my mind. For instance, I usually walk around the lake for twenty minutes and listen to birds, which makes me feel peaceful.

제안: Chú ý phát âm và từ vựng chính xác; tránh lỗi từ (bags → parks) và hoàn thành ý tưởng: nêu lý do cụ thể, sử dụng cấu trúc đầy đủ và liên kết logic giữa các mệnh đề.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide convenient places to relax and exercise. For example, more small parks near offices would let people take short breaks during workdays and reduce stress.

제안: Làm rõ tên và lý do bằng câu hoàn chỉnh: tránh nhầm lẫn tên riêng, giải thích cụ thể vì sao muốn đến công viên đó và dùng từ miêu tả phù hợp; giới hạn độ dài tối đa 4–5 câu.

예시: Yes, I want to visit Kong Park next year because I have heard it has beautiful gardens and a large playground. I think it will be relaxing and fun, especially if I go with friends or family.

× Yes, I like going to parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The question 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' uses past tense, so the response must use past tense. Change 'like' (present) to 'liked' (past) to match tense. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions: 'I liked going to parks.'

× Going to parks very well.

✓ I enjoyed going to parks a lot.

The original lacks a subject and a proper verb phrase. 'Going to parks very well' is not grammatically complete. Use a subject 'I' and a past-tense verb 'enjoyed' with an adverbial phrase 'a lot' to express degree. Suggestion: form complete clauses with subject + verb: 'I enjoyed going to parks a lot.'

× It's make me feel comfortable.

✓ It made me feel comfortable.

The contraction 'It's' (it is) with base verb 'make' is incorrect for past context. The question asked about childhood, so use past simple 'made'. Also 'it made me' is correct subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: use 'made' for past events: 'It made me feel comfortable.'

× Yes, I like when I walk.

✓ Yes, I like walking now.

The examiner asked about current habits; 'I like when I walk' is awkward. Prefer present simple with gerund 'walking' to express general liking. 'I like walking now' or 'I like to walk' are natural. Suggestion: use 'I like walking' for habitual present.

× Make me feel comfortable and peaceful in the park.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable and peaceful in the park.

The sentence lacks a subject and correct verb form. In present simple for a general statement, use 'it makes' (third person singular) with adjective complements. Suggestion: include subject 'it' and correct verb 'makes': 'It makes me feel comfortable and peaceful in the park.'

× Yes, I like more bags in my city because when I feel. Uh. Work convenient.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they make it more convenient to relax near my workplace.

The original uses 'bags' instead of 'parks' and fragments that are unclear. Following the intended meaning and the question about wanting more parks, use conditional 'would like' to express preference and explain why. Also combine fragments into a complete sentence. Suggestion: use 'would like more parks' and give a clear reason: 'because they make it more convenient to relax near my workplace.'

× Yes, I want to go Kung Park in the future because Kolang Park is very happy and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Kung Park in the future because Kolang Park is very pleasant and comfortable.

Use 'visit' rather than 'go' + proper noun with article if needed. 'Want to go ... in the future' is acceptable but 'visit' is more natural. Also 'happy' describes people, not places; use 'pleasant' or 'comfortable' for parks. Ensure tense matches future intention. Suggestion: 'I want to visit Kung Park in the future because Kolang Park is very pleasant and comfortable.'