Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid tense and agreement mistakes.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. For example, I often went to the park with my father after he finished work, and we would meet neighbors and make new friends there.

제안: Give a clear, coherent answer: choose a balanced opinion and express it in one or two sentences. Use linking words like "but" or "however" and correct contractions. Keep it within five sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: I still like going to parks, but only sometimes. For instance, I enjoy visiting parks when I go with friends because we play games and chat, but I usually avoid them alone because there is nothing interesting to do.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a specific reason and one concrete benefit. Use formal linking words such as "because" and avoid vague endings like "experiencing."

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and relaxation. For example, new parks would give families a place to exercise and children safe areas to play.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then name the park and give a specific reason why you want to visit. Use linking words like "however" or "but" properly and keep the answer concise.

예시: I don't have a specific list of parks I must visit, but if I had the chance I would go to Rizal Park because it is historically important and has wide open spaces and monuments I want to see.

× Yes, I enjoy going to the park with my father when he comes home and I remember when we go to the park is I meet new people and have friends.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to the park with my father when I was a child, and I remember that when we went to the park I met new people and made friends.

Tense consistency error: the question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense throughout. 'Enjoy' should be 'enjoyed', 'when we go' -> 'when we went', 'I meet' -> 'I met', and 'have friends' -> 'made friends' to indicate forming friendships in the past. Also add 'that' for clarity.'

× It's no. And yes because I really enjoy going there when I'm with my friends, and no because I don't know what I'm gonna do there if I don't have someone or I have nothing to do there.

✓ Not really. Yes, I enjoy going there when I'm with my friends, but no, I don't like going alone because I wouldn't know what to do if I had no one and nothing to do there.

Pronoun and informal contraction issues plus clarity: 'It's no' is unnatural; use 'Not really.' Use 'but' to contrast yes/no. Replace informal 'gonna' with 'would' or 'wouldn't' for conditional. 'I don't have someone' is vague; 'I had no one' is clearer. Maintain consistent modal and conditional structures.'

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city 'cause I really enjoy traveling and seeing new places and experiencing.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I really enjoy traveling, seeing new places, and new experiences.

Verb form and parallelism: the list should use parallel structures. 'Seeing new places and experiencing' is incomplete; change to 'and new experiences' or 'and experiencing new things.' Also avoid informal 'cause' and use 'because.'

× There's no particular park I really want to go, but if I have the chance I would say Rizal Park.

✓ There is no particular park I really want to go to, but if I had the chance I would choose Rizal Park.

Preposition and conditional tense: 'want to go' requires 'to' at the end -> 'want to go to.' The conditional referring to a hypothetical future uses past form 'if I had the chance' rather than 'if I have the chance.' Also 'say Rizal Park' is better as 'choose Rizal Park.'