Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and add a brief specific detail. Use past simple consistently and avoid unnecessary words.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went to the local park to have picnics with my friends and watch the ducks on the pond.

제안: Give a clear, direct response using present simple or present perfect and correct grammar. Mention specific reasons with linking words (for example, because or so) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because I am busy with work and prefer resting at home. Also, I find walking in strong sunshine uncomfortable, so I usually avoid outdoor activities during hot days.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g. 'parks', 'trees', 'breathe'). Add one concise supporting reason using a linking word and a specific detail about benefits.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would make the city more attractive and provide shade from trees. For example, additional green space would improve air quality and give residents more places to exercise.

제안: Be specific and accurate about place names and grammar. State which park and where it is, then give a reason using linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Royal Botanic Gardens in Australia and Tongari Park in New Zealand because they are famous for their landscapes and unique plant collections. I am especially interested in seeing their native plants and scenic walking trails.

× When I was a child I usually go to parks to have a picnic with my friends and look some beautiful sights.

✓ When I was a child I usually went to parks to have a picnic with my friends and saw some beautiful sights.

The sentence refers to habitual actions in the past, so use the past simple 'went' and 'saw' rather than present 'go' and base verb 'look'. Use 'saw' for past perception and 'saw some beautiful sights' is natural. Suggestion: Change present verbs to past simple when talking about past habitual actions.

× I'm actually not because I didn't have time to go to the park and I was so lazy.

✓ I'm actually not, because I don't have time to go to the park and I'm quite lazy.

The student uses past tense 'didn't have' and 'was' while the context (current preference) requires present tense. Use 'don't have' and 'I'm' to describe current inability and habit. Suggestion: Use present simple for current states and habits.

× I want to lay on my bed every time and I think go to parks was so tired and the sunshine me was very hot.

✓ I want to lie on my bed all the time, and I think going to parks is very tiring and the sunshine feels very hot to me.

Several issues: 'lay' is transitive (requires object); the intransitive form is 'lie'. 'Every time' better as 'all the time'. 'Think go to parks was so tired' needs gerund 'going' and present tense 'is' to match current view; 'tiring' describes something that makes you tired. 'The sunshine me was very hot' is incorrect word order and grammar; use 'the sunshine feels very hot to me.' Suggestion: Use 'lie' for reclining, use gerunds after 'think' when describing activities, and use 'feels ... to me' for sensations.

× Of course that's right, because Park make my city beautiful and there are many beautiful green trains and beautiful flowers everywhere.

✓ Of course, that's right, because parks make my city beautiful and there are many green trees and beautiful flowers everywhere.

'Park' should be plural 'parks' to match general statement; no definite article needed. 'Make' must agree with plural subject 'parks'. 'Trains' is wrong word; context requires 'trees'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and matching verb forms for general statements and check word choice (trees vs trains).

× Park makes our city air more fresh and we can breath more fresh air.

✓ Parks make the air in our city fresher, and we can breathe fresher air.

If speaking generally, use plural 'parks' with 'make'. 'City air' needs 'the air in our city' or 'our city's air'. 'More fresh' is unidiomatic; use comparative 'fresher'. 'Breath' is a noun; the verb is 'breathe'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct comparative forms and verb/noun distinction.

× Actually, yes, I want to go America's Huangshi Park and Australia and in New Zealand because there there's place was so beautiful and famous in the world.

✓ Actually, yes, I want to go to Huangshi Park in America, to Australia, and to New Zealand because those places are very beautiful and famous in the world.

Use 'go to' before place names. Word order: 'Huangshi Park in America' or 'America's Huangshi Park' is acceptable but requires 'to'. 'There there's place was' is ungrammatical; use 'those places are'. Use present simple 'are' to describe general qualities. Also plural 'places' suits multiple locations. Suggestion: Use 'go to' + place, keep consistent prepositions, use 'those places are' for descriptions, and use present simple for general facts.