Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 内容较相关但存在语法错误、用词不当和冗余表达。建议回答时先给出主题句，然后用一到两个连贯的细节支持，注意时态一致和单复数，避免多余短句。例如：把“I often feeding fish and monkeys”改为“I often fed the fish and fed the monkeys”，把“have had picnics and the trees”修改为“had picnics under the trees”。减少重复（如多次使用“often”），并保持句子不超过五句。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents on weekends and we fed the fish and monkeys there. We also had picnics under the trees and shared sandwiches and fruit, which was always pleasant.

제안: 回答意思明确但句子结构和语法问题较多，导致表达不自然。建议用一到两句直接回应，再补充具体细节并用连接词（for example, so, because）。注意人称和动词形式（I am a university student; I enjoy going），避免句子残缺，补全信息。

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because I am a university student and need a break from studying. In my spare time I go there to exercise, for example I run or play badminton, and enjoy the many trees and fresh air.

제안: 观点明确但有语法和词汇错误（如“see more park”、“doing exercise such as running badminton”）。建议先给出主题句，再用连接词列举具体活动，注意词组搭配（make new friends/meet new people），并修正词序和复数形式。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer space for many activities. For example, people can run, play badminton or basketball, and also meet new friends, which helps them stay healthy.

제안: 回答内容清楚但存在用词和句子连贯性问题（如“Circle Performance”、“looking forward horse riding”）。建议先声明想去的公园，再给出具体理由并用正确的固定搭配（look forward to horse riding/seeing the animal shows）。减少重复并把细节说得更具体。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Changlong Animal Park next holiday with my friends. I am excited because we can watch the animal performances and I am looking forward to trying horse riding there.