Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid tense errors, reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to run around the playground and play games with my siblings on weekends, because it was a chance to be outdoors and spend time with my family.

제안: Fix tense and grammar issues and make the reason concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words such as because or so. Avoid vague phrases like "very healing."

예시: Definitely — I still enjoy going to parks because I like walking there to get fresh air and relax. For example, I go for a slow 30-minute walk most evenings to reduce stress and improve my fitness.

제안: Make the point clear and grammatical. State your opinion first, then give two specific reasons with linking words (because, for example). Avoid unclear phrases like "study from trees in the past."

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because air pollution is a problem and trees improve air quality. For example, more parks would give children safe places to play and families a green space to relax.

제안: Be specific and finish your sentences. Begin with a clear statement of which park or place you want to visit, then give concise reasons and one specific detail. Avoid vague or incomplete sentences and check grammar (e.g. "I saw them in a national park in Malaysia").

예시: Yes — I would like to visit the panda reserve near Chengdu because I enjoy watching pandas and learning about their conservation. For example, seeing pandas in a reserve would be memorable, and it would remind me of the movie Kung Fu Panda.

× Yes I did. I used to love going to the parks and a little girl. For example, I run around the park and have fun with my family. I often look forward for weekends to go on there with my family or my friends.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to love going to parks as a little girl. For example, I would run around the park and have fun with my family. I often looked forward to weekends to go there with my family or my friends.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'and a little girl' is incorrect word order and should be 'as a little girl' (preposition use and sentence structure). 'I run' should be past habitual 'I would run' to match past context. 'I often look forward for weekends' should be past 'I often looked forward to weekends' and preposition 'to' not 'for'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistency for childhood descriptions; use 'used to' or 'would' for habitual past actions; use 'look forward to' not 'look forward for'.

× Definitely yes, if I went when I were a child I went there to place but now I love going to the park for walking and have fresh air. Slowly walking is a good practice for me and I feel very healing.

✓ Definitely yes. When I went there as a child, I went to play, but now I love going to the park to walk and get fresh air. Walking slowly is good exercise for me and I feel very refreshed.

Errors: 'if I went when I were a child' mixes conditional and incorrect past-subject agreement; 'were' should be 'was' but the whole clause should be 'When I went there as a child'. 'went there to place' is incorrect word choice; use 'to play'. 'for walking and have fresh air' should be 'to walk and get fresh air' (verb form and collocation). 'Slowly walking' is awkward; 'Walking slowly' or 'Walking slowly is good practice' but 'good exercise' and 'feel very refreshed' are more natural than 'feel very healing'. Suggestions: use 'when' for past time, match verb forms, choose correct verb collocations (go to the park to walk; get fresh air), and use natural adjectives ('refreshed').

× Yes, I've have to say I want to see more park in my city because it's so polluted nowadays and people need to study from trees in the past and children need of fresh air and a fun space to play.

✓ Yes, I have to say I want to see more parks in my city because it's so polluted nowadays. People need to learn from trees in the past is unclear; instead: people need green spaces and children need fresh air and a fun space to play.

Problems: 'I've have to say' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'I have to say' or 'I must say'. 'more park' needs plural 'more parks'. The clause 'people need to study from trees in the past' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely meant 'people need green spaces' or 'people need to learn the importance of trees'. 'children need of fresh air' should be 'children need fresh air' (remove 'of'). Suggestions: fix auxiliary redundancy, use plural nouns after 'more', replace unclear phrasing with 'green spaces' or 'learn the importance of trees', and remove unnecessary prepositions.

× I love to visit Chengdu in China to see pandas because I find them pretty curious and have little good feel. They also give remind me of the movie Kung Fu Panda which I really love. Actually I saw them is a National Park in Malaysia but unfortunately I was.

✓ I would love to visit Chengdu in China to see pandas because I find them very curious and cute. They also remind me of the movie Kung Fu Panda, which I really love. Actually I saw similar animals in a national park in Malaysia, but unfortunately I was unable to visit then.

Errors: 'I love to visit' needs conditional 'I would love to visit' for future desire; 'pretty curious and have little good feel' is ungrammatical — use 'very curious and cute' or 'they make me feel good'. 'They also give remind me' is wrong word order; use 'they also remind me'. 'Actually I saw them is a National Park in Malaysia but unfortunately I was.' is ungrammatical and missing object/verb: clarify 'I saw similar animals in a national park in Malaysia, but unfortunately I was unable to visit then' or 'I was unable to see them.' Suggestions: use 'would' for desires, choose correct adjectives, use correct verb order 'remind me', and complete the final clause with a clear past inability.