Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense and word choice (e.g., liked, parks, because) and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they had many swings and slides. In addition, I often went there with my friends, so it was a social and fun place to play.

제안: Use correct present tense and better sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason with a linking word. Correct vocabulary (still like, parks, peaceful) and avoid redundant words.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and full of greenery. For example, I often walk there in the evenings to relax and get some fresh air.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Correct plural forms and clarify meaning (e.g., 'few' instead of 'short'). Provide one concrete example or consequence of having more parks.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we only have a few small parks at the moment. More parks would give children more places to play and families more outdoor space for weekend activities.

제안: Be specific about the park and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer naming the park or city, then give one or two clear reasons why you want to visit, using linking words and correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the parks in Paris in the future, especially the Luxembourg Gardens. I want to go because it is famous for its beautiful flower beds and peaceful atmosphere, and I could enjoy relaxing walks there.

× Yes, I like parked as Park as a child because Park is playing for children, that's why.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because parks are places for children to play.

Errors: wrong verb form 'like' for past preference (use past tense 'liked'), incorrect word 'parked' and repetition 'Park as', incorrect noun use 'Park is playing' and incorrect clause 'that's why'. Suggestion: use 'liked' to match past time, use 'going to parks' to express visiting, plural 'parks' to indicate general parks, and a clear clause 'parks are places for children to play.' Keep sentences concise.

× Yes, I am still like to going past because park is very beautiful place to spend time that's why.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because parks are very beautiful places to spend time.

Errors: 'am still like' mixes 'be' verb with 'like' incorrectly; use simple present 'still like'. 'to going' is incorrect infinitive + gerund; use gerund 'going'. 'past' incorrect word. Missing articles and plural forms: 'park is very beautiful place' should be 'parks are very beautiful places'. Suggestion: use 'I still like going to parks' and adjust nouns to plural when speaking generally.

× Yes I like to more park in my city because park is very short, short short like 2-3 parks in my city. That's why I like more park in my city because children like go to park and play.

✓ Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there are very few parks, only about two or three. I would like more parks because children like to go to parks and play.

Errors: 'like to more park' incorrect word order and missing modal 'would' for polite desire. 'park is very short' wrong adjective; use 'few' or 'not many'. Repetition and missing 'there are' for existence. 'children like go to park' needs 'to go to parks'. Suggestions: use 'I would like more parks' and 'there are very few parks, only about two or three' and use infinitive 'to go' and plural 'parks'.

× Yes, that is a there are one park and I want to go in the future there there park in Paris, which is in the Paris. The the park is very beautiful and nice place that's why.

✓ Yes, there is a park I want to visit in the future in Paris. The park is very beautiful and a nice place.

Errors: redundant words 'that is a there are one park', incorrect use of 'there are' with singular 'one park' (use 'there is one park' or 'there is a park'). Repetition 'there there' and 'the Paris' incorrect article; use 'Paris' without article. 'The the park' duplicate 'the'. Missing article before 'nice place'. Suggestions: use 'There is a park I want to visit in Paris in the future.' and 'The park is very beautiful and a nice place.'