Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically correct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article usage and verb tense, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I used to visit the local park almost every weekend to play football with my friends, which helped me stay active and make close friends.

제안: Fix article and subject-verb agreement, and make the response slightly more concise and natural. Begin with a direct statement, then give one clear, specific reason using a linking word such as 'because' or 'as'.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because outdoor activities help me connect with nature and spend quality time with friends and family.

제안: Improve grammar, coherence and clarity. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases ('Jungle and more and more trees').

예시: Absolutely. As the city becomes more built-up, more parks would provide green spaces that improve mental health and offer safe places for children to play and develop.

제안: Be specific and concise. Correct phrasing and combine ideas into a clear, natural answer. Mention one named park and one future plan using a linking word like 'also' or 'besides'.

예시: I often visit the Amanorophone Park near my house because it's peaceful, and I would also like to explore famous parks around the world, such as Central Park in New York or Hyde Park in London.

× Yeah, I like going to park.

✓ Yeah, I like going to the park.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before singular countable noun 'park' when referring to parks in general or a specific concept; 'going to park' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'the park' or plural 'parks' depending on meaning.

× I used to go and play outdoor sports in park.

✓ I used to go and play outdoor sports in the park.

The preposition 'in' is acceptable but the article 'the' is needed before 'park'. Without 'the' it is incorrect. Also 'outdoor sports' is fine. Suggestion: include 'the' or use plural 'parks' if speaking generally.

× Yes, I still like going to park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park.

Same article error as before: singular countable noun 'park' requires an article. Use 'the park' or plural 'parks' depending on intended meaning.

× Outdoor activities in the park helps us connect with the nature as well as spend really good quality time with people.

✓ Outdoor activities in the park help us connect with nature as well as spend really good quality time with people.

Subject 'Outdoor activities' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' not 'helps'. Also remove the article 'the' before 'nature' because 'nature' is uncountable and used in general. Suggestion: use plural verb agreement and omit 'the'.

× Absolutely, because city lives is becoming like a concrete jungle.

✓ Absolutely, because city life is becoming like a concrete jungle.

Plural 'lives' is incorrect here; the expression is 'city life' (singular, uncountable). Subject-verb agreement: 'city life is' is correct. Suggestion: use 'city life' or 'urban life'.

× Jungle and more and more trees, parks help for an overall development of a person and the child raising in the city.

✓ More trees and parks help the overall development of a person and the raising of children in the city.

The original sentence has disordered and incomplete phrases. 'Jungle and more and more trees' is unclear; better to say 'More trees and parks'. 'Help for' is incorrect collocation; use 'help' followed by noun phrase. 'The child raising' should be 'the raising of children' or 'children's upbringing'. Suggestion: reorder elements, use correct collocations and plural forms for children.

× I really like going to the Amanorophone park near my house and I would like to explore the parks in and around the world.

✓ I really like going to the Amanorophone Park near my house and I would like to explore parks in and around the world.

Proper nouns for park names capitalize 'Park'. Using 'the' before a named park is optional depending on the name; here 'the' is unnecessary. 'The parks in and around the world' is awkward; better 'parks in and around the world' or 'parks around the world'. Suggestion: capitalize name and remove 'the' before 'parks'.