Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use specific details. For example, correct pronunciation/word choice ("Jazz" seems unintended) and verb tense: use past tense consistently. Replace vague phrases with specific memories and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I did. I loved visiting the local park with my parents and two siblings; we often had picnics and played football there on Sunday afternoons, which created many happy memories.

제안: Good direct answer and relevant details. Improve grammatical accuracy and coherence: use correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid informal filler words like "literally" unless accurate. Provide one or two specific activities and link them with a connector.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy parks, especially the one near my house because we have three in the neighborhood. I usually go there with my son to walk along the trails and watch birds, and we relax on the grass at weekends.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (singular/plural, word order). Use linking words to give two clear reasons and add a specific example of how extra parks would help. Avoid vague phrases like "play a good place."

예시: Absolutely. I would like more parks because they provide peaceful places to relax and safe spaces for family gatherings. For instance, additional parks near apartment blocks would give children more room to play and neighbours places to meet.

제안: Be fluent and avoid fillers ("uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence and then give a specific example: name a country or a famous park and explain why. Use linking phrases like "for example" or "for instance."

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would love to visit famous parks abroad. For example, I hope to see Central Park in New York and Stanley Park in Vancouver to experience their landscapes and local culture.

× Jazz I did. I love going to the park when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I did. I loved going to the park when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I love' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame. Also 'Jazz' seems to be a filler or misheard word; replace with 'Yes' for clarity.

× Especially going to parks with my family is kind of a good activity to do with my family and sibling.

✓ Especially going to parks with my family was a good activity to do with my siblings.

The original is repetitive and has inconsistent tense. Use past tense 'was' to match childhood reference and plural 'siblings' if referring to more than one; remove repeated phrase 'with my family' and use clearer noun phrase.

× I live sharing the moment with them a lot.

✓ I love sharing those moments with them a lot.

'Live' is a typo for 'love'. Use plural 'moments' to match 'a lot' and 'those' to refer back to earlier events. 'Them' is fine as the object pronoun.

× Yes, I do still love going to the park, especially the one near my house.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park, especially the one near my house.

The placement of auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for affirmative present tense; 'I still love' is more natural. Tense is present and appropriate.

× At the moment we literally have three parks around our neighborhood.

✓ At the moment we literally have three parks in our neighborhood.

Use preposition 'in' rather than 'around' for natural collocation with 'neighborhood'. 'Three parks' is correct plural.

× I love going there with my son, explore some nature and relax on the weekend.

✓ I love going there with my son, exploring nature and relaxing on the weekend.

After 'love going there with my son,' parallel gerund forms should be used: 'exploring' and 'relaxing' to maintain parallel structure. Also 'explore some nature' is unnatural; use 'exploring nature'.

× Absolutely, I would love to see more park in my city because park is a play a good place for relaxing, enjoy and gatherings with family and friends.

✓ Absolutely, I would love to see more parks in my city because parks are a great place for relaxing, enjoying, and gatherings with family and friends.

Use plural 'parks' to match 'more'. Change 'park is a play a good place' to 'parks are a great place'. Use gerund forms 'relaxing' and 'enjoying' for parallelism and natural phrasing. 'Gatherings' remains plural.

× To be honest, I don't have, uh, the name of the parks that I want to go in the filters, but I would love to explore more parks, especially in different countries.

✓ To be honest, I don't have the names of any specific parks I want to visit, but I would love to explore more parks, especially in different countries.

The original is wordy and incorrect in phrases like 'go in the filters'. Use 'names of any specific parks' and 'want to visit' for clarity and correct verb choice. Keep plural 'parks' consistent.

× That would be, uh, good experience.

✓ That would be a great experience.

The article 'a' is needed before 'good experience' and 'great' is more natural collocation. Tense 'would be' is fine for hypothetical future; keep it.