Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make tense consistent, avoid repetition, shorten slightly and add one specific detail (e.g., name or feature) to make it more vivid. Use one topic sentence then a supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents and I often visited Riverside Park, where we biked along the river and relaxed under large oak trees, which made those afternoons feel peaceful.

제안: Keep present tense consistent, combine short repetitive sentences, and add a specific time/frequency or a sensory detail to enrich the answer. Use linking words like "also" or "sometimes" appropriately.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often sit on a bench with a cup of coffee and watch the ducks on the pond, and sometimes I visit on my days off to catch up with friends and relax.

제안: Avoid vague phrases like "enjoy a beautiful scenery" — be specific about why more parks help (e.g., cleaner air, quiet). Vary sentence openings and use a linking word to connect reasons.

예시: Yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because they provide cleaner air and quiet spaces. For example, parks with many trees and fewer crowds would help me unwind after work and reduce stress.

제안: Avoid repeating "beautiful" and make language more natural by giving one clear preference and adding a concrete future plan. Use a linking word such as "however" appropriately and keep sentences concise.

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit a quiet, tree-filled park next month to take photos and meet friends for a picnic.

× Yes, I love going to parks when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for memories of childhood (e.g., 'I loved going to parks').

× In fact, I have this memory of me and my parents going to this specific park where we enjoyed a lot of biking, walking and enjoying the beautiful scenery.

✓ In fact, I have a memory of my parents and me going to a specific park where we enjoyed a lot of biking, walking and the beautiful scenery.

Use objective pronoun 'me' after a preposition or in a compound object ('my parents and me'). Also 'have this memory of' is better as 'have a memory of'. Avoid repeating 'enjoyed' and 'enjoying' together; use a parallel structure ('enjoyed biking, walking and the beautiful scenery').

× The park is filled with trees and we would go there to relax and unwind.

✓ The park was filled with trees and we would go there to relax and unwind.

The context is past (childhood), so 'is filled' should be past 'was filled' to maintain consistent tense. 'Would go' is acceptable for habitual past actions, but the descriptive clause should also be past tense.

× I usually go there to have a cup of coffee in the middle of the park by the bench.

✓ I usually go there to have a cup of coffee in the middle of the park by a bench.

Using 'the bench' implies a specific bench already known; 'a bench' is more natural when speaking generally about usual behavior. Use articles to match specificity.

× I would sit there and enjoy the beautiful scenery.

✓ I sit there and enjoy the beautiful scenery.

The speaker is describing usual present habits ('Do you still like going to parks now?') so simple present 'I sit' is more appropriate than conditional/modal 'I would sit'. Use 'would' for hypothetical or habitual past actions only.

× Sometimes I would go there on my days off with my friends to catch up and relax.

✓ Sometimes I go there on my days off with my friends to catch up and relax.

Again, the question asks about current habits; use simple present 'I go' rather than 'would', which implies habitual past or conditional. Use 'would' only for past habits.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because I enjoy a beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because I enjoy beautiful scenery.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' and do not use 'a beautiful scenery'. Use 'beautiful scenery' or 'a beautiful view'.

× I'd like to go there if it has a lot of trees and few people.

✓ I'd like to go there if it has a lot of trees and few people.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but slightly unnatural: consider 'and not many people' or 'and is not crowded' for clarity. No mandatory correction under given list; original is retained.

× It makes me feel more relaxed after work and I'd like to unwind there.

✓ It makes me feel more relaxed after work and I like to unwind there.

The exchange asks about general preferences; 'I'd like to unwind there' expresses hypothetical desire. If referring to usual effect, use simple present 'I like to unwind there'. If expressing desire, original is acceptable. Suggest using consistent present-tense phrasing for habitual effects.

× There aren't specific parks I'd like to go to in the future.

✓ There aren't any specific parks I'd like to go to in the future.

The sentence omits the quantifier 'any' which is required in negative statements with plural countable nouns ('specific parks'). Use 'aren't any specific parks' for grammatical correctness.

× I enjoy capturing beautiful moments and a beautiful scenery.

✓ I enjoy capturing beautiful moments and beautiful scenery.

As before, 'scenery' is uncountable and should not have the article 'a'. Keep parallel structure by using 'beautiful' for both nouns without the article.