Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Потрібно робити відповіді більш граматично правильними та зв’язними: починайте із чіткої теми (так/ні + коротке пояснення), уникайте повторів і заповнювачів (uh, umm), використовуйте правильні часи (past для дитинства) і конкретні деталі.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends or family and we played on the swings and slides. Those visits felt carefree and joyful because we spent whole afternoons running around and pretending to be explorers.

제안: Потрібно формулювати відповідь прямо, уникати невпевнених звуків і заплутаних фраз; використовуйте теперішній простий для регулярних дій і додайте коротку конкретну причину.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with my sister and brother, and we often sit on the benches or walk around the lake. It helps us relax and catch up after busy weeks.

제안: Потрібно давати чітку думку, пояснювати причину конкретно і використовувати правильну лексику (e.g., "well maintained", "old", "few"). Уникайте обривистих речень і закінчуйте думку повністю.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. Although there are some parks already, many are poorly maintained and look old, so new or renovated green spaces would improve residents' quality of life.

제안: Давайте конкретну інформацію і використовуйте майбутній час правильно; назвіть місце або особливість парку і причину, чому ви хочете туди поїхати. Уникайте повторів і заповнювачів.

예시: Yes, there is one park I'd like to visit in the future. It is in a nearby city and is famous for its botanical gardens and large playgrounds, so I want to take my brother and sister there for a day out.

× I during my childhood I try to go to the playgrounds or parks with my friends or family.

✓ During my childhood I tried to go to playgrounds or parks with my friends or family.

The sentence refers to past habitual action, so the verb should be in past tense ('tried') rather than present ('try'). Use past simple for repeated actions in the past. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child, I tried to go...' to improve fluency.

× Umm, I love to swim on the swings.

✓ Umm, I loved to swing on the swings.

The verb 'swim on the swings' uses incorrect verb and preposition: you 'swing' on swings, not 'swim on'. Also the context is childhood, so past tense 'loved' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'swing on the swings' or simply 'play on the swings'.

× I usually go to parks with my uh, sister and brother, uh, and say you often swing, uh, on swings, umm.

✓ I usually go to parks with my sister and brother, and we often swing on the swings.

The original mixes disfluent fragments and incorrect pronoun usage 'say you'. Use present simple 'usually go' and 'we often swing' for habitual actions. Also remove filler words and ensure subject 'we' matches the verb.

× Sure, it would be great because in my city are parks, but it uh, not well.

✓ Sure, it would be great because there are parks in my city, but they are not well maintained.

The original word order 'in my city are parks' is incorrect in English; use 'there are parks in my city'. Also 'not well' is incomplete—use a passive adjective phrase 'not well maintained' to describe the parks. Suggestion: 'there are parks in my city, but they are not well maintained.'

× It's almost to be old and.

✓ They are almost old and run down.

The fragment 'It's almost to be old and' is ungrammatical. 'It's' (it is) doesn't match plural 'parks'—use 'they are'. 'Almost to be old' is incorrect; instead say 'almost old' or better 'almost falling apart/run down'. Suggestion: 'They are almost old and run down.'

× Yes, I have one parks where I would like to go with my brother and sister and future I'd parks, uh, locate in another city.

✓ Yes, I have one park where I would like to go with my brother and sister in the future; the park is located in another city.

'One parks' mixes singular and plural—use 'one park'. Also verb forms and word order were incorrect: 'future I'd parks, uh, locate' is garbled. Use 'in the future' and 'is located in another city.' Suggestion: 'Yes, there is one park I would like to visit with my brother and sister in the future; it is located in another city.'

× So we need to go there.

✓ So we will need to go there.

Context is future plan; 'need to' can be present but 'will need to' clarifies future intention. Use future tense for planned actions. Suggestion: 'So we will need to go there' or 'So we plan to go there.'