Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите более прямо и грамматически корректно: начните с общего утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных подробности. Избегайте бессмысленных междометий и повторений. Улучшите лексику (например, 'surprising' и 'emotional' не подходят для описания парка — лучше 'pleasant' или 'cheerful').

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and classmates, and we played games, had picnics and fed the ducks. Those visits felt cheerful and comforting, and I remember them fondly.

제안: Формулируйте предложение чётко: заявите мнение, затем объясните причину с конкретикой. Избегайте тавтологии («exciting and peaceful place and this place»). Используйте связки (for example, because, so) и завершайте мысль. Проверьте грамматику (word order and articles).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful yet refreshing. For example, I like walking among trees to relax after work and sometimes I read a book on a bench to clear my mind.

제안: Дайте полное предложение и добавьте конкретные причины и возможные выгоды. Уберите паузы и слова-паразиты. Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) и конкретизируйте, кто выиграет от дополнительных парков.

예시: Yes, of course. I think more parks would improve the city because they provide safe places for children to play, reduce pollution and offer residents green spaces for exercise and relaxation.

제안: Назовите название парка правильно и объясните причину посещения с конкретными деталями. Сформулируйте предложение логично: сначала желание, затем причина и, возможно, план. Следите за артиклями и порядком слов.

예시: Honestly, I'd love to visit Parc des Princes in France because I saw beautiful footage of French parks on TV as a child. I want to experience the atmosphere in person and take photos of the gardens and historic features.

× Oh wow, that's all the trust. Uh, when I was a child, I went to the park with my family relatives and with my classmates as he's a kind of surprising and, and emotional, emotional place.

✓ Oh wow, that's all true. When I was a child, I went to the park with my family, relatives and classmates because it was a kind of surprising and emotional place.

Student used 'that's all the trust' and 'as he's' which are incorrect pronoun and expression choices. Replace with 'that's all true' and 'because it was' to refer back to childhood parks. Also add commas and remove repeated words. Suggestion: use correct pronouns and conjunctions and keep verb tense consistent (past) when talking about childhood. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, I do, because for me and this kind of place is exciting and peaceful place and this place it will for.

✓ Yes, I do, because for me this kind of place is exciting and peaceful.

Sentence contains redundant phrases and incorrect structure ('for me and this kind of place', 'this place it will for'). Simplify to 'for me this kind of place is exciting and peaceful'. Ensure subject, verb and complements are in correct order and avoid extra pronouns. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, of course it will be better, uh, because, uh, nowadays, uh, a lot of children like uh. Parks.

✓ Yes, of course it would be better, because nowadays a lot of children like parks.

Context of desire (Would you like to see more parks) expects conditional/ hypothetical 'would' rather than 'will'. Also remove filler words and incorrect punctuation. Use 'parks' lowercase and avoid isolated periods. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× Honestly I really want to go France friends Park and because when I was a child I saw these places in France in TV.

✓ Honestly, I really want to go to France's Friends Park because when I was a child I saw those places on TV in France.

Missing preposition 'to' before a destination and incorrect use of possessive or name: use 'France's Friends Park' or 'Friends Park in France'. Also 'in TV' is incorrect; use 'on TV'. Use 'those places' to refer back. Add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 22