Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural, relevant and gives specific details, but it's slightly long and contains one small redundancy (“run around” and “burn off my energy” overlap). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details linked with a simple connector (e.g., “for example” or “and”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (use “slides” or “playground equipment” instead of repeating actions).

예시: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often went with friends to climb the jungle gym and use the swings and slides, which was a great way to have fun and stay active.

제안: Good direct response and clear reason, but the answer is slightly long and could be organized more clearly with a topic sentence followed by a linked reason. Use a linking word (e.g., “because” or “since”) to show cause, and consider adding one brief contrasting detail to enrich the response (e.g., when you might visit).

예시: Not really, because I have a heavy workload and am studying, so I rarely have free time. I might visit a park occasionally on weekends if I finish my tasks early.

제안: A clear, direct answer with a reason — well done. To improve further, add one specific supporting detail or example (e.g., how parks benefit communities or a particular problem they would solve) and use a linking phrase like “for example” or “such as” to make the point more persuasive.

예시: Yes, I would. Parks provide green space and help reduce air pollution; for example, more trees and lawns would improve air quality and give residents a place to exercise and relax.

제안: You answered directly and gave reasons, which is good, but the phrasing could be more concise and natural. Start with a brief topic sentence, then add one or two linked supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., “in the future” and “as an adult” both indicate time). Use correct collocations (“visit museums” not “visiting museum”) and a linking word like “because” or “so”.

예시: No, I don't have any specific parks in mind. I prefer indoor activities such as visiting museums or going to the cinema because I find them more comfortable and interesting.

× I used to go there with my friends to run around, climb the jungle gym, swing and play a slider, which helped me burn off my energy and have fun.

✓ I used to go there with my friends to run around, climb the jungle gym, swing and play on a slide, which helped me burn off my energy and have fun.

The phrase 'play a slider' is incorrect; the common collocation is 'play on a slide' or 'go down a slide'. This is an issue of using the correct verb + -ing or prepositional construction with a playground object. Replace 'play a slider' with 'play on a slide' to use the correct preposition and noun form. Suggestion: Use common collocations for playground equipment, e.g. 'play on a slide' or 'go down a slide.'

× Not really, I'm too busy these days, I have a heavy workload and I'm also studying so I don't have much free time to visit parks anymore.

✓ Not really. I'm too busy these days; I have a heavy workload and I'm also studying, so I don't have much free time to visit parks anymore.

This sentence mainly has punctuation and sentence-connection issues rather than tense errors, but it uses present simple and present continuous correctly. However, to improve clarity and grammar flow, separate independent clauses properly and add a comma before 'so.' Suggestion: Use proper punctuation to join clauses: use a semicolon or period between independent clauses and a comma before coordinating conjunctions like 'so.'

× As an adult I will probably prefer indoor activities like visiting museum or go to the cinema because I find them more comfortable and interesting.

✓ As an adult, I will probably prefer indoor activities like visiting museums or going to the cinema because I find them more comfortable and interesting.

Two problems: 'visiting museum' needs plural or an article ('a museum' or 'museums'), and when listing parallel gerunds, forms must match. 'Like visiting museums or going to the cinema' uses parallel -ing forms. This falls under verb + -ing form and article use. Suggestion: Use parallel structures and correct articles: 'visiting museums' or 'visiting a museum' and 'going to the cinema.'