Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good direct answer with relevant supporting details. Improve by making the response slightly more concise and varied in vocabulary, and by adding a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “and” or “also”). Avoid repeating obvious words (e.g., “park” twice) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played games and did simple exercises there, and it was a great place to meet friends and relatives.

제안: Content is relevant but there are grammatical errors and hesitations. Improve grammar (verb forms and countable/plural agreement), remove filler words, and use a linking word to show reason (e.g., “because” or “so”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and vary vocabulary (use “relax” or “de-stress”).

예시: I don't go to parks as often now because I have little free time and usually work in my garden, which is nearby. Walking there helps me relax and gives me a short break without traveling to a park.

제안: Meaning is understandable but grammar and coherence need work. Correct tense and article use, fix repetitions, and add a clear topic sentence. Provide a specific reason and an example of how parks would benefit people. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. I grew up in a small rural village without parks, so additional green spaces here would give students and residents places to meet and unwind after a long day.

제안: Good idea and descriptive detail, but fix conditional phrasing and some word choice and redundancy. Use one correct conditional form (“If I had the chance”) and avoid repeated words. Use clearer vocabulary (“scenery” singular, “flutter”) and link reasons to the main point.

예시: If I had the chance, I would visit Kung Fu National Park. It is famous for its beautiful scenery and countless butterflies, which would make it an ideal place for hiking and photography.

× I often played games and did simple exercises there, and it was also a good place to meet my friends and relatives.

✓ I often played games and did simple exercises there, and it was also a good place to meet my friends and relatives.

No change needed: sentence uses past tense consistently and the verb forms are correct. It includes present participle forms? None incorrect. Keep as is.

× To be honest, I don't have much free time these days so I usually prefer working in my garden because it's nearby and save time.

✓ To be honest, I don't have much free time these days so I usually prefer working in my garden because it's nearby and saves time.

The clause 'save time' refers to the garden (third person singular subject 'it'), so the verb should be in the present simple third person singular form 'saves'. Suggestion: use 'saves' to match subject-verb agreement and maintain present tense consistency.

× Umm, walking in my gardens help me unwind and provide me a short break without going all the way to the park.

✓ Umm, walking in my garden helps me unwind and provides me with a short break without going all the way to the park.

'Walking' as a gerund phrase is singular, so verbs should be third person singular 'helps' and 'provides'. Also 'garden' should be singular to match earlier 'my garden', and 'provide me a short break' is improved to 'provide me with a short break' for correct collocation. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement for gerund subjects and use 'provide ... with' when appropriate.

× I was live in a small village in rural area so there was any park there.

✓ I used to live in a small village in a rural area so there weren't any parks there.

Original mixes past progressive 'was live' incorrectly and misuses 'any' with affirmative structure. Use 'used to live' to express past habit/state. 'There weren't any parks' correctly uses negative past plural to indicate absence. Also include articles: 'a rural area'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual states and match count with 'parks' plural when saying 'any' with negative.

× So I I would like to see more park in my city so students can have more time to meet each others and unwind after a long day.

✓ So I would like to see more parks in my city so students can have more time to meet each other and unwind after a long day.

Use plural 'parks' after 'more'. Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Each others' is incorrect; use 'each other' for reciprocal meaning. No article needed before 'parks' when using 'more'. Suggestion: check plural forms after 'more' and use correct reciprocal pronoun 'each other'.

× If I had chance had a chance, I would like to visit Kung Fu National Park.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to visit Kung Fu National Park.

The conditional 'If I had the chance' needs the article 'the' and avoid repeating 'had a chance'. Use a single correct clause for the second conditional meaning a hypothetical future visit. Suggestion: use 'If I had the chance' or 'If I had a chance' but not both.

× It is well known for its beautiful sceneries and countless butterflies that flut flutter in the sky, which would make it a perfect place for hiking and taking photos.

✓ It is well known for its beautiful scenery and countless butterflies that flit in the sky, which would make it a perfect place for hiking and taking photos.

Use uncountable noun 'scenery' rather than plural 'sceneries'. The verb 'flut' is a typo; correct verb is 'flit' (present tense plural subject 'butterflies' take the base verb in a relative clause). Suggestion: use 'scenery' for landscapes and correct verb 'flit' for quick fluttering motion; ensure no typos.