Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で内容も分かりやすいですが、表現がやや繰り返しで具体性が不足しています。例えば“liked playing at the park”と“played hide and seek”が同じ内容を重複して伝えているため、別の活動や感情を加えると良いです。また、接続詞を用いて文の流れを改善すると自然さが増します。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a place where I could play with my friends and explore. For instance, after school we often played hide-and-seek or climbed the low trees, which made me feel adventurous and happy.

제안: 答えは明確で理由も述べられていますが、語彙の選択と文法の小さな誤り（例："a lot of green spaces"や"feel calmed"）を改善するとより自然になります。より具体的な状況や頻度を加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks because they help me relax and recharge. For example, I often walk through the tree-lined paths and sit by the pond, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

제안: アイデアは明確ですが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長な表現が目立ちます（例："in urban areas"、"there is a few green spaces"、文の終わりの不完全さ）。接続詞を整理して一文ごとに一つのポイントを述べ、具体的な利点を挙げると良いです。

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because it is quite urban and lacks green spaces. More parks would give residents places to relax, exercise, and escape the noise of the city after a busy day at work.

제안: 興味と理由は示されていますが、公園名や地理の扱いに誤りがあり（"Tysons National Park"は不自然）、語彙や文の結びつけが単純です。具体的な場所の特徴や計画（いつ・誰と）を加えると説得力が増します。また地名は正確に表記してください。

예시: Yes, I would love to visit a national park in Hokkaido because of its vast natural scenery. For example, I hope to visit Daisetsuzan National Park to hike its mountains and enjoy the alpine landscapes, which I think would be very refreshing.

× Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I liked playing at the park with my friends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I liked playing in the park with my friends.

'At the park' is not wrong but 'in the park' is more natural when referring to activities taking place inside the park area. Also sentence correctly uses past tense for childhood memories. Suggestion: use 'in the park' for natural phrasing.

× After school I usually played hide and seek with my friends.

✓ After school I usually played hide-and-seek with my friends.

Hyphenation of compound noun 'hide-and-seek' is standard. The past tense 'played' is correct for habitual past actions. Suggestion: use hyphens for the compound noun.

× Yes, I still like going to parks because it makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because they make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

Pronoun agreement: 'parks' (plural) requires plural pronoun 'they' instead of singular 'it'. Use 'they make' to match the plural subject. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× For example, when I go to the park, there is a lot of green spaces so it makes me feel calmed.

✓ For example, when I go to the park, there are a lot of green spaces, so they make me feel calm.

Subject-verb agreement: 'a lot of green spaces' is plural and requires 'there are'. 'Calmed' is the wrong form; use the adjective 'calm' to describe how you feel. Also pronoun 'they' agrees with 'green spaces'. Suggestion: match verb number and use correct adjective form.

× Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because my city is in urban areas so there is a few green spaces so I want to refresh.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because my city is an urban area, so there are few green spaces and I want to refresh myself.

Use singular 'an urban area' or 'urban areas' consistently; 'is in urban areas' is awkward. 'There is a few green spaces' is incorrect: plural requires 'there are' and 'few' without 'a' unless you mean 'a few' (some). Also 'refresh' should be reflexive 'refresh myself'. Suggestion: choose singular/plural consistently, use 'there are', and include reflexive pronoun when appropriate.

× I want to feel refreshed after a busy work so I want to have more parks in my.

✓ I want to feel refreshed after a busy day at work, so I want to have more parks in my city.

'Busy work' is incorrect collocation; use 'a busy day at work'. Sentence was missing the object after 'in my' — add 'city'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and complete prepositional phrases.

× Yes, I want to go National Park in Hokkaido because there is a lot of nature and it will make me feel refreshed.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the national parks in Hokkaido because there is a lot of nature and they will make me feel refreshed.

Use 'go to' before a place. If referring to 'national park' generally in Hokkaido, plural 'national parks' may be intended; adjust pronoun 'they' to agree. Also 'national park' as a proper noun should be 'the national parks' or a specific park name. Suggestion: include appropriate preposition 'to' and ensure number agreement.

× For example, I want to go to Tysons National Park.

✓ For example, I want to go to Tyson's National Park.

Proper names may require possessive or correct spelling; if the park's name is Tyson's, include the apostrophe. If the actual park is 'Tyrsono' or different, use the correct official name. Suggestion: verify and use the correct proper noun form.

× The mountain is very beautiful and I want to see that.

✓ The mountains are very beautiful and I want to see them.

If referring to more than one mountain, use plural 'mountains' and pronoun 'them'. If referring to one mountain, specify which one and use 'it'. 'See that' is informal and unclear. Suggestion: match number and use appropriate pronoun for clarity.