Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 시제 오류를 고치고, 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 대답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 적절히 사용해 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(예: "really enjoy" 여러 번)을 피하세요.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they gave me a sense of freedom. For example, I often rode my bicycle and ran on the paths with my friends, which felt exciting and healthy.

제안: 동사의 형태와 시제를 바로잡고 반복된 단어를 줄이세요. 현재 습관을 말할 때는 현재 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 이유를 말할 때 연결어를 써서 논리를 명확히 하세요. 감정 표현은 보다 자연스러운 어구(eg. "feel stressed")로 바꾸세요.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax when I feel stressed. For instance, I usually take a short walk or sit on a bench to clear my mind.

제안: 단수·복수와 주어-동사 일치를 확인하세요 ("parks have", "parks are"). 문장을 두 부분으로 나눠 주제문(예: Yes, I would)과 구체적 이유를 제공하세요. 세부 설명은 구체적 예(예: 특정 경관, 시설)를 포함하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because new parks often have different layouts and plant species. For example, a park with a river or exotic trees would create a new atmosphere and help me relax.

제안: 도시·장소 이름 앞에 전치사와 관사를 정확히 사용하세요 ("go to Central Park"). 이유를 더 구체적으로 말하고 불필요한 말(eg. "Umm")을 줄이세요. 하나의 이유를 명확히 제시하고 관련 세부사항(예: 어떤 영화, 어떤 장면)이면 더 좋습니다.

예시: I would like to visit Central Park in New York because I've seen it featured in many films and TV shows. For example, I love its large open spaces and iconic spots like Bethesda Terrace, which look beautiful on screen.

× Yes, I really enjoy to visit the parks all around my city.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy visiting the parks all around my city.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive. Use 'enjoy visiting' instead of 'enjoy to visit'. Suggestion: Practice verbs commonly followed by gerunds (enjoy, avoid, finish, consider) and use 'verb + -ing'.

× There's a lot of parks over there, so I really enjoy it because of the freedom and there's a lot to do like riding a bicycle or just run.

✓ There are a lot of parks over there, so I really enjoy them because of the freedom and there is a lot to do, like riding a bicycle or just running.

'There' with plural noun requires 'are' not 'is/there's'. 'Parks' is plural, so use 'there are'. Also 'enjoy it' should refer to 'them' (parks). After 'to do, like' use gerund forms: 'riding' and 'running'. Suggestion: Match 'there is/are' to singular/plural and use pronouns that agree with their antecedents; use gerunds after 'like' when listing activities.

× It's very.

✓ It was very fun.

The sentence fragment 'It's very.' is incomplete; it lacks an adjective or context. Based on past context about childhood, past tense 'was' and adjective 'fun' complete the thought. Suggestion: Ensure sentences include subject and predicate; choose appropriate tense and adjective to complete meaning.

× Yes, I'm still likes go to the parks because when I when I feel very stressed or very bad feelings, going to the parks relax me well.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the parks because when I feel very stressed or have bad feelings, going to the parks relaxes me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'I' with present simple uses 'like' not 'likes'. After 'like' use gerund 'going'. 'Relax' needs third-person singular 'relaxes' because its subject is 'going to the parks' (a singular gerund phrase). Also 'have bad feelings' is a correct collocation. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement and identify the grammatical subject to choose verb form; prefer 'feel stressed' or 'have bad feelings'.

× So I usually go to the park when I was stressed.

✓ So I usually go to the park when I am stressed.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual present action, so use present tense 'am' not past 'was'. Suggestion: Match time adverbs (usually) with present simple tense for habits.

× Yes, because new parks has another shape of their park like river or different kind of trees is always give me another feeling and it also helps relax.

✓ Yes, because new parks have different features such as rivers or different kinds of trees; they always give me a different feeling and also help me relax.

Plural 'parks' requires plural verb 'have' not 'has'. 'Another shape of their park' is awkward; use 'different features' or 'features such as rivers'. 'Different kind' should be 'different kinds'. 'Is always give' incorrect; use 'they always give'. 'Helps relax' should be 'help me relax' or 'help relax me' (natural: 'help me relax'). Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use natural collocations like 'different kinds of trees' and 'help me relax', and break long clauses into clearer phrases.

× Actually, I really want to go Central Park in New York, Umm, Central Park I because there are a lot of movie that show Central Park and I'm always inspired by movie like that.

✓ Actually, I really want to go to Central Park in New York. Central Park is shown in a lot of movies and I'm always inspired by movies like that.

Use the preposition 'go to' with places. 'Central Park' as a proper noun does not need 'the' here. 'There are a lot of movie' should be 'a lot of movies'. Use plural 'movies' and 'are shown in' or 'show' needs passive or active structure; 'Central Park is shown in a lot of movies' is natural. 'Movie like that' should be plural 'movies like that'. Suggestion: Use 'go to' for destinations, correct singular/plural for 'movie/movies', and prefer passive 'is shown in' when describing appearances in films.