Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğrudan soruyu yanıtlıyor ancak dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları, tekrarlamalar ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. Cümleleri düzgün zaman kullanımıyla (past simple), özne-fiil uyumuyla düzeltin ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Ayrıca bir konu cümlesi kurup, ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Örnek: “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.” diye başlayın, sonra kimle gittiğinizi ve en sevdiğiniz aktiviteyi belirtin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because) kullanarak akışı güçlendirin.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My sister and I often visited the local playground, where we played on swings and climbed the jungle gym. I especially liked afternoons there because it was a chance to meet friends and enjoy the fresh air.

제안: Cevap net ama bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve doğal olmayan ifadeler var (ör. “going to coffee”). İddianızı destekleyici bir sebep ve alternatif bir tercih sunun. Daha doğal bir kalıp kullanın: “I don't really enjoy going to parks anymore” ve nedenini belirtin. Kısa ve akıcı cümleler tercih edin, bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisi kurun.

예시: I don't really enjoy going to parks anymore because most of them are designed for children. Instead, I prefer going to cafes where I can relax and meet friends. However, I sometimes visit larger parks for a walk or exercise.

제안: Cevap olumlu fakat dolu dolu ve düzeltilmiş ifadeye ihtiyaç var; çok fazla duraksama ve anlamsal belirsizlik mevcut. Daha açık bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra nedenleri belirtin ve bir sonuç ekleyin. Gereksiz dolgusözlerden kaçının. Örneğin şehirdeki estetik ve yaşam kalitesi açısından faydaları vurgulayın.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many areas are dominated by ugly buildings. Parks would improve the appearance of the neighborhoods and provide green spaces for people to relax. This would also encourage outdoor activities and make the city more attractive.

제안: Cevap belirsiz ve tamamlanmamış; kapanış cümlesi eksik ve yine çok fazla duraksama var. Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayıp, örnek bir park ismi ve nedenini belirtin. Gelecek zaman ifadelerini (would like to, want to) doğru kullanın ve cümleyi tamamlayın. Örneğin aday Londra parklarını görmek istediğini belirtirse hangi parkları ve neden görmek istediğini söyleyebilir.

예시: I don't have a specific local park in mind, but I would love to visit famous parks abroad. For example, I would like to see Hyde Park in London because of its large open spaces and historic landmarks. Visiting such parks would be a great way to experience the city's culture and nature.

× Yes I would love to going to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I would love to go to parks as a child.

The verb after 'would love to' should be in the base form, not the -ing form. Use 'to go' after 'would love to'. Suggestion: learn common verb patterns with 'would like/would love/to want' and practice 'to + base verb' structures.

× When I was child me and my sister always going to some parks and some places that we can play, for example playground, playground and yes it like it is most of wonder.

✓ When I was a child, my sister and I always went to parks and places where we could play, for example playgrounds, and I enjoyed them very much.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (Article errors), incorrect word order 'me and my sister' should be 'my sister and I' (Incorrect use of pronouns/subject order), 'always going' lacks a finite past tense verb—use past tense 'always went' (Past tense issue), 'places that we can play' should be 'places where we could play' to match past context (Present tense issue), repeated 'playground' and awkward phrase 'it like it is most of wonder' fixed to 'I enjoyed them very much' (Sentence structure and word choice). Suggestions: add articles, keep subject before verb, match tense consistently, and simplify sentences.

× No, I don't really enjoy going to park now because I am getting old and the places like places for children is not for me and that's why I am not enjoying that kind of places.

✓ No, I don't really enjoy going to parks now because I'm getting older and places for children are not for me, so I don't enjoy that kind of place.

Errors: 'going to park' needs plural or article ('going to parks' or 'going to the park') (Article/plural issue), 'I am getting old' better as 'I'm getting older' (comparative/adjective form), 'places ... is' has subject-verb disagreement; 'places' requires 'are' (Subject-verb agreement), 'not enjoying that kind of places' should be 'don't enjoy that kind of place' to match number and tense. Suggestions: use correct plural/article, ensure subject-verb agreement, and maintain consistent tense.

× I prefer going to coffee.

✓ I prefer going to coffee shops.

'Going to coffee' is ungrammatical; 'coffee' is a noun for a beverage. The intended meaning is likely 'going to a coffee shop' or 'having coffee'. Use 'coffee shops' or 'a cafe'. Suggestion: use noun phrases 'coffee shop' or 'cafe' when referring to places.

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city uh, because uh, in my city there's a lot of uh buildings that uh are not uh, very uh beautiful and uh, with the parks, uh, are still going to be more umm well around it and umm beautiful.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because there are many buildings that are not very attractive, and parks would make the area more pleasant and beautiful.

Problems: spoken fillers removed and grammar fixed. 'in my city there's a lot of buildings' should be 'there are a lot of buildings' (There be issue/subject-verb agreement), 'with the parks, are still going to be more well around it' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to 'parks would make the area more pleasant and beautiful' (Sentence structure). Suggestion: practice 'there is/there are' with countable nouns and simplify causal clauses using 'would' for hypothetical improvements.

× Well, uh, for now I don't have any park that I want to go in the future, but of course I would love to see umm, parks that umm in have places in a foreign country.

✓ Well, for now I don't have any park I want to visit in the future, but of course I would love to see parks in foreign countries.

Errors: 'any park that I want to go in the future' awkward; use 'any park I want to visit in the future' (verb choice and structure). 'parks that in have places in a foreign country' is ungrammatical—intended 'parks in foreign countries'. Also article use 'a foreign country' changed to plural 'foreign countries' to match general desire. Suggestion: use 'visit' for places and place preposition 'in' before location; simplify phrasing.

× For instance in London, I want to see parks in it because it is very.

✓ For instance, in London I want to see the parks because they are very beautiful.

Problems: 'parks in it' is awkward; use 'the parks' or 'parks there' (Incorrect use of pronouns/location). 'because it is very' is incomplete; needs an adjective like 'beautiful' and plural agreement 'they are'. Suggestion: complete the adjective and ensure pronoun number matches the noun.