Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um, repeated words), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because / so). Aim for 2–3 grammatically complete sentences with correct verb forms and pluralization.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they gave me space to run and play. For example, my family and I used to visit a small park after dinner, where I would play on the swings and ride my bike.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer linking phrases. Begin with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Replace informal fragments with complete sentences and reduce hesitation. Use linking words like because, so, or for example.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a tiring day. For instance, when I feel stressed or bored I often walk in a nearby park or meet friends there to chat and feel happier.

제안: Give a direct response and organize reasons logically. Avoid slang (wanna) and sentence fragments. Provide specific benefits of more parks (exercise, community events) and use linking words like because, so, or which helps to explain.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and socializing. More parks would make it easier to go jogging, meet friends, and hold community activities, which improves local life.

제안: Be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then name the park or city and give reasons why you want to visit using clear, complete sentences. Replace informal phrases and correct grammar (e.g., ‘I want’ instead of ‘I wanna’).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Australia in the future, especially national parks like the Blue Mountains. I want to travel abroad to see beautiful landscapes and experience different wildlife and scenery.

× Yes, of course I really I actually like going to park as a child because when I was trying I was very very like uh noisy space so that I always come to the park after dinner with my family like my.

✓ Yes, of course. I actually liked going to parks as a child because I grew up in a very noisy place, so I always went to the park after dinner with my family.

Errors: 'going to park' should be 'going to parks' (singular/plural). 'like a child' tense and form wrong: use past tense 'liked' for past habit. 'trying' unclear; likely 'growing up' or 'living' — corrected to 'grew up in'. 'noisy space' should be 'noisy place'. 'come' should be past 'went'. Suggestion: use plural for general places, match past tense for childhood habits, and choose correct nouns ('place'). Use clear verbs for life events (grow up/live).

× Yes, of course I still prefer going to park now because when I so bored and very exhausted, I always come to the park to reduce stress or uh, hanging out the park with friend so that I really happy.

✓ Yes, of course. I still prefer going to parks now because when I am bored or very exhausted, I always go to the park to reduce stress or hang out in the park with friends, which makes me very happy.

Errors: 'going to park' should be 'going to parks' (general), 'when I so bored' missing verb and article — should be 'when I am bored'. 'come' should be 'go' for habitual present. 'hanging out the park' should be 'hang out in the park'. 'friend' should be plural 'friends'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple, use correct prepositions ('in the park'), and pluralize countable nouns when general or multiple people are meant.

× Oh, of course I wanna like, uh, a green space or uh, go jogging so that I can. Commit friends or socialize with neighborhood and because it's very clear.

✓ Oh, of course. I want a green space or to go jogging so that I can meet friends or socialize with my neighbours, and because it is very peaceful.

Errors: 'wanna' informal; use 'want'. 'I can. Commit friends' is incorrect: 'commit' is wrong verb — use 'meet'. 'socialize with neighborhood' should be 'socialize with my neighbours' (noun and possessive). 'very clear' likely intended 'very peaceful' or 'clean' depending on context. Suggestion: use appropriate modal phrasing ('want to'), choose correct collocations ('meet friends', 'socialize with neighbours'), and avoid slang in formal responses.

× Afford yes, I wanna go to the park in Australia in the future because I wanna go abroad and I can see the world like very pretty and I very like come into my.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to parks in Australia in the future because I want to travel abroad and see how beautiful the world is, and I would really enjoy visiting them.

Errors: 'Afford yes' unclear — corrected to 'Yes'. 'wanna' informal; use 'would like to' or 'want to'. 'go to the park in Australia' -> 'go to parks in Australia' (plural/general). 'I can see the world like very pretty' ungrammatical; corrected to 'see how beautiful the world is'. 'I very like come into my' meaningless — rephrased to 'I would really enjoy visiting them.' Suggestion: use future intentions with 'would like to' or 'want to', pluralize when speaking generally, and form comparative/descriptive clauses correctly ('see how + adjective + subject + be').