Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar, using a clear topic sentence, adding concise supporting details, and varying vocabulary. Avoid repetition (e.g., mentioning scooter and bike twice) and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often rode my scooter and bicycle there, enjoying the fresh air and the wind on my face. Because the park had wide paths and lots of trees, it felt safe and relaxing, so I spent many afternoons playing there.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and clear reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about when and why your preference changed.

예시: Not really — I don't visit parks as often now. Since about seventh grade I have focused more on learning art, so I prefer visiting museums where I can study paintings and sculptures. As a result, museums have become my main leisure interest.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and add well-connected, specific reasons. Improve grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), use linking words (first, moreover, therefore), and give concrete examples of benefits.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer many benefits. For example, parks increase green space and trees, which improve air quality and reduce heat in summer. Moreover, well-designed parks make neighborhoods more attractive and provide places for exercise and family activities.

제안: Give a direct answer then expand with specific possibilities and reasons. Correct grammar and use linking words (e.g., maybe, however, for example) to make your plans clearer.

예시: I'm not sure at the moment because I haven't followed news about local parks recently. However, I might visit some national parks abroad in the future, for example Yosemite or Banff, because I would like to see dramatic landscapes and do some hiking.

× Yes, I liked going to park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child.

The noun 'park' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place habitually visited (going to the park). Use 'the' before singular countable nouns when the listener understands which place is meant.

× I used to play scooter and riding bike in the park.

✓ I used to play on a scooter and ride a bike in the park.

After 'used to' we use the base form for verbs (ride), not the -ing form. Also 'play scooter' is unnatural; use 'play on a scooter' and use articles for countable nouns ('a scooter', 'a bike').

× I like to feeling of wind blow over me.

✓ I like the feeling of the wind blowing over me.

Use the noun 'feeling' with the definite article 'the' and the gerund 'blowing' to describe an action. Also include 'the' before 'wind' for a general natural phenomenon in this context.

× When I was playing scooter and bike, it felt cool.

✓ When I was riding a scooter and a bike, it felt cool.

Use the present participle 'riding' for the activity; add articles 'a' before 'scooter' and 'a bike'. 'Playing' is not appropriate with these vehicles.

× No I don't still like going to park now and spend more time on learning art since I was grade 7 so I prefer to admiring art in museum now.

✓ No, I don't still like going to the park now and have spent more time learning art since I was in grade 7, so I prefer admiring art in museums now.

Multiple issues: 'going to park' needs 'the park'; 'don't still like' is awkward—'don't still' acceptable but better rephrased as 'don't like going to the park now' while retaining meaning; verb tense consistency requires present perfect 'have spent' for an action continuing since grade 7 and include 'in' before 'grade 7'; 'to admiring' is wrong—use 'admire' or 'admiring' after 'prefer' (prefer + -ing), so 'prefer admiring art'; 'in museum' needs plural or article: 'in museums'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'would like' correctly expresses a polite desire. No change needed.

× Park can bring many benefits to city.

✓ Parks can bring many benefits to a city.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally, and include the indefinite article 'a' before 'city' to indicate any city in general.

× First, using a park need to grow many trees, tree can make air clear.

✓ First, using parks requires planting many trees; trees can make the air cleaner.

'Using a park need to grow many trees' is ungrammatical. Use 'requires planting' or 'requires that you plant'. 'Tree' should be plural 'trees' and 'make air clear' should be 'make the air cleaner'—use comparative adjective 'cleaner' and definite article 'the' before 'air'.

× Besides, it can make the scene of city more beautiful.

✓ Besides, it can make the cityscape more beautiful.

'Scene of city' is awkward; use 'cityscape' or 'the city' with 'more beautiful'. Also include 'the' before 'city' if using 'city'.

× So I would like to see more park in my city.

✓ So I would like to see more parks in my city.

Use plural 'parks' when referring to more than one, and include plural agreement between 'more' and noun.

× I'm not sure, I haven't focused on new information about park for a long time.

✓ I'm not sure; I haven't focused on new information about parks for a long time.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally. Also punctuation: use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. 'For a long time' works with present perfect 'haven't focused'.

× Maybe I will decide to visit some National Park in other country.

✓ Maybe I will decide to visit some national parks in another country.

Use plural 'national parks' if unspecified or 'a national park' for one; 'other country' should be 'another country'. Capitalization: 'national park' need not be capitalized unless part of a name.