Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness: use correct articles and tense, and give a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say when you disliked parks and why, then add one specific supporting detail.

예시: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks when I was a child because I was quite introverted. For instance, I preferred staying home and reading rather than playing with other children, so parks felt uncomfortable.

제안: Fix small grammar points and add a linking word to make it coherent. Use articles correctly, pluralize nouns, and optionally give a brief example of what you do in the park to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I do like going to parks now because I use them for cardio and to complete my 10,000 steps while listening to music. For example, I usually jog around the lake for 30 minutes and then do stretching exercises.

제안: Answer directly to the yes/no question and expand with a reason using a linking word. Mention the benefit of having more parks and give one specific suggestion or comparison.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is only one park at the moment and it gets crowded. More parks would provide space for exercise and relaxation; for example, a small neighborhood park with a walking path would help reduce congestion.

제안: Make the response smoother and correct small errors: remove filler words, fix article use, and give a specific reason why you want to visit that park. Adding one detail about Nara Park will make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future, but especially Nara Park in Japan because of its famous deer and historic temples. I think walking among the deer and seeing the temples would be a unique cultural experience.

× No, I didn't like going to park when I was child because I was an introvert type person.

✓ No, I didn't like going to the park when I was a child because I was an introverted person.

Missing definite article before 'park' and missing indefinite article before 'child'; 'introvert type person' is unnatural — use adjective 'introverted'. Suggestion: use 'the park' for specific place, 'a child' for age reference, and 'introverted' as adjective. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yeah, I like going to park now because I have to do cardio and complete my 10K steps while listening my music.

✓ Yeah, I like going to the park now because I have to do cardio and complete my 10,000 steps while listening to my music.

Missing definite article before 'park'; '10K' should be written as '10,000' in formal writing; missing preposition 'to' after 'listening'. Suggestion: use 'the park', write numbers clearly, and use 'listening to'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× In my city there is only one park and I often go there.

✓ In my city there is only one park, and I often go there.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically but needs a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses for clarity. No preposition error; however structure acceptable. Suggestion: add comma. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I yeah, I would like to go many parks in future, but mainly I would like to go Nara Park that is in Japan.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future, but mainly I would like to go to Nara Park in Japan.

Awkward filler 'I yeah' replaced with 'Yes'; 'go many parks' is incorrect verb-object structure — use 'visit many parks'; 'in future' needs article 'the'; missing preposition 'to' after 'go' for place; 'that is in Japan' is wordy — use 'in Japan'. Suggestion: use 'visit', include 'the future', and use 'go to' for places. Grammar problem type ID:6