Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use correct tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler words.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there on weekends, where I played on swings and made friends with neighborhood kids.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and correct present tense. Explain reasons briefly with linking words (e.g., because, so) and give a concise alternative activity. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

예시: Not really, because I’m busier now with university and part-time work, so I rarely have free time. Instead, I usually go to the library to study and relax quietly.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid fillers/repetition. Mention concrete benefits (e.g., recreation, air quality, community events).

예시: Yes, I would. Parks are like the heart of a city because they provide green space, cleaner air and places for people to exercise or meet. For example, weekend markets or outdoor classes could bring the community together.

제안: Be specific about which park and give a brief reason why you want to visit. Use correct tense and avoid repeating words. Keep to one or two supporting sentences with clear linking words (e.g., because, although, so).

예시: Yes, my parents told me about a new park near my home that opened recently. I’d like to visit because it has a lake and walking trails, but I haven’t had time yet because I’m currently studying in Ningbo.

× Yes, of course, When I have a spare time, my parents always take me to the parks when I was a child, to have fun, to make friends.

✓ Yes, of course. When I had spare time, my parents always took me to the park when I was a child to have fun and make friends.

The sentence mixes present tense with past events. Use past tense ('had', 'took') for childhood actions. Also 'spare time' is uncountable so drop 'a', and 'the park' is more natural singular. Combine similar infinitives for parallel structure.

× To be honest, not at all because ways my age is uh added.

✓ To be honest, not really, because my age has increased.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace colloquial fragments with a clear clause: 'my age has increased' correctly expresses getting older. 'Not at all' was too strong and conflicted with explanation; 'not really' fits.

× I have more words worked to like study so I have no time to park.

✓ I have more work and need to study, so I have no time to go to the park.

Verb and noun forms are incorrect: use 'work' (uncountable) not 'words' and 'need to study' for purpose. 'Park' as a place requires 'go to the park'. Ensure verbs match present habitual situation.

× I prefer to go to the library to study.

✓ I prefer to go to the library to study.

This sentence is correct; it uses the present simple to express preference and is appropriate for the context.

× Yes, of course, the park is just like a heart of a city.

✓ Yes, of course. A park is like the heart of a city.

Use the indefinite article 'a' when speaking generally about any park, and 'the heart of a city' is a fixed expression requiring 'the'.

× There are many plants and flowers and some some, uh, some ways to, uh, let people to have fun to gather fresh air.

✓ There are many plants and flowers and some areas for people to have fun and get fresh air.

Remove fillers and redundant 'to's. 'Ways' is odd here; 'areas' or 'spaces' is better. Use infinitive 'to have fun' and base verb 'get' for 'gather fresh air'.

× Yes, of course just the last weekend my parents told me that there are new park near my house.

✓ Yes, of course. Just last weekend my parents told me that there is a new park near my house.

Use 'last weekend' (no 'the'), 'there is' for singular existence, and 'a new park' with indefinite article. Subject-verb agreement requires 'is' with singular 'park'.

× So because of my I'm now in Ningbo so I I don't have time to go back.

✓ Because I'm now in Ningbo, I don't have time to go back.

Remove extraneous words and fix word order: 'Because I'm now in Ningbo' introduces the reason. Use present simple 'don't have' for current situation.

× So I'd I'd hope I will go to the my house to.

✓ So I hope I will go back to my hometown/house.

Condense duplicate 'I'd I'd' to 'I', and say 'I hope I will go back to my house' or 'hometown'. Remove unnecessary 'to' at the end and choose 'go back to' for returning. Use future tense 'will go' for a future intention.