Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ неестественен и содержит множество грамматических ошибок, тавтологию и бессвязные фразы. Нужно давать чёткое вступительное предложение, затем одно-две поддерживающие детали, используя связующие слова. Исправляйте времена (past simple для воспоминаний), согласование подлежащего и сказуемого, и избегайте отрицательных двойных форм.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Every day I walked to the park with my parents, where I played games and ran around with other children. Because of those experiences, I have fond memories of being outdoors.

제안: Ответ содержит слова-паразиты, ошибки в грамматике (present simple/continuous, gerund/infinitive) и нечеткую структуру. Начните с прямого ответа, затем укажите причины последовательно с использованием связок (because, so, therefore). Укажите конкретные факты и избегайте ненужных слов и фраз.

예시: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because I am very busy with work and my studies. As a result, I usually spend my free time at home or studying instead of relaxing outdoors.

제안: Ответ смутный и неубедителен: бесполезные повторения, некорректные фразы («it's not my envy») и слабая логика. Нужно прямо ответить на вопрос о желании видеть больше парков и объяснить причину с помощью конкретных аргументов или примеров, применяя связки (however, although, because, so).

예시: Personally, I would not mind having more parks in the city, but I also see the need for new buildings and infrastructure. However, if planners add green spaces alongside development, it would benefit residents' health and the environment.

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит неточности в словоупотреблении («couplet» неверно) и ненужные паузы. Нужно дать более точное описание парка и объяснить, почему вы хотите туда пойти, используя связующие слова и конкретные детали (history, atmosphere, features).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Imam Bukhari Park in Samarkand. I have heard it is historically important and very peaceful, and I would enjoy seeing the traditional landscaping and learning about its significance to older generations.

× My childhood was really interesting so I every day go to the park with my parents and playing so many games.

✓ My childhood was really interesting, so every day I went to the park with my parents and played many games.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses and has incorrect verb forms. 'My childhood was' sets past time, so actions should be in past tense: 'go' -> 'went' (Present tense issue). 'playing' should be the past form 'played' to match. Also word order 'every day I went' is more natural. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood descriptions and use simple past for repeated past actions.

× I think neither. Nobody not loves parks.

✓ I don't think so. Nobody loves parks.

Double negative 'Nobody not loves' is incorrect; use a single negative. 'I think neither' is unnatural; 'I don't think so' or 'I don't either' are correct. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and use standard negative constructions.

× To be honest, nowadays I don't like to go into parks, uh, really nicely because of my age.

✓ To be honest, nowadays I don't like going to parks very much because of my age.

Use 'don't like going' (gerund) rather than 'don't like to go into' for general preferences (Present tense issue/Verb + -ing form). 'Really nicely' is incorrect adverb choice; use 'very much' to express degree. Suggestion: use gerund after 'like' for habits and choose appropriate adverbs.

× I have so many works in home.

✓ I have so much work at home.

'Work' as an uncountable noun takes 'much' not 'many', and 'at home' is the correct prepositional phrase (Incorrect use of quantifiers/Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: use 'much work' for uncountable and 'at home' for location.

× Uh, I study, I work and because of it, I can't going to parks and just relax, uh, in this area.

✓ I study and I work, and because of that, I can't go to parks and relax in these areas.

After modal 'can't' use base verb 'go', not 'going' (Verb in the present participle form). 'Because of it' is awkward; 'because of that' is better. 'This area' -> 'these areas' or 'parks' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use base form after modal verbs and choose clearer demonstratives.

× As I told you before, I don't like going to parks now, uh, it's not my envy.

✓ As I told you before, I don't like going to parks now; it's not something I envy.

'It's not my envy' is incorrect collocation; 'I don't envy that' or 'it's not something I envy' is better (Present tense issue/Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: use correct expressions for 'envy' and maintain present tense consistency.

× So I think I don't want it because I, I want more buildings in my country, so I don't like it.

✓ So I think I don't want more parks because I prefer more buildings in my country.

Sentence is repetitive and unclear. 'I don't want it' and 'so I don't like it' are vague; specify 'more parks'. Use 'prefer' to state preference. Suggestion: simplify and avoid repetition for clarity.

× Of course, yes, I want to go to the park in Samarkand which is called Imam Bukhari.

✓ Of course. Yes, I want to go to the park in Samarkand called Imam Bukhari.

The relative clause 'which is called' is wordy; 'called Imam Bukhari' is more natural. Also punctuation adjusted. Suggestion: use reduced relative clauses for names.

× It's a park, uh, which is couplet for our grandparents and our generation in the past.

✓ It's a park that used to be popular with our grandparents and our generation in the past.

'Couplet' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'popular' or 'memorable'. Use 'used to be popular with' to indicate past popularity (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: choose correct adjectives and use 'used to' for past habitual states.