Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì và động từ), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu không cần thiết. Cố gắng sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and) và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc chi tiết (ví dụ: chơi trò chơi, xem thiên nhiên).

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they helped me relax after a busy day. For example, I often played on the swings and watched birds with my family, which made me feel calm and happy.

제안: Sử dụng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh, chủ-động từ cần phù hợp (I often go, I study -> after school), tránh tiếng lấp lửng (umm, hmm). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, and, so).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After school, I often go with my friends to sit under the trees and read books together, which is a nice way to relax.

제안: Trình bày câu trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + lý do), sửa lỗi cấu trúc (so → therefore, or use because), và diễn đạt rõ ý (muốn nhiều công viên vì không gian, giải trí, sức khỏe). Tránh câu bị gián đoạn và thêm lí do cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we need more green spaces for exercise and relaxing. For instance, more parks would give children places to play and adults places to walk or meet friends.

제안: Trả lời rõ ràng về mục tiêu tương lai (I want to go to X park or I want to visit more parks). Loại bỏ tiếng ậm ừ, dùng từ đúng (e.g., 'greener' thay 'grispy'), và cung cấp lý do cụ thể (relaxation, walking dog).

예시: In the future, I would like to visit more parks, especially larger and greener ones, because they help me relax and I can walk my dog there every weekend.

× Yes, when I were a child I very prefer going to park because it is help me relax after a stressful day and I feel comfortable when when going to.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really preferred going to the park because it helped me relax after a stressful day and I felt comfortable when going there.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' (subject-verb agreement with singular I in past) -> ID 27/5; 'very prefer' is incorrect collocation and tense for past context, use 'really preferred' -> present tense issue changed to past (ID 6/5); 'going to park' missing article 'the' -> article error (ID 22/17); 'it is help me' wrong verb form and tense, should be 'it helped me' (past tense and past participle) -> ID 5/9; repeated 'when when' duplication -> sentence structure error (ID 26); 'going to' incomplete, should be 'going there' -> pronoun/article problem. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for childhood descriptions, ensure correct subject-verb agreement (I was), use articles before singular countable nouns (the park), and choose correct verb forms (helped).

× I still like going to park. Hmm after a study at school I often together with my friend to read under trees and.

✓ I still like going to the park. After studying at school I often go with my friend to read under the trees.

Errors: 'going to park' missing article 'the' -> article error ID 22/17; 'after a study at school' is unidiomatic, use gerund 'after studying' -> verb + -ing form ID 8/6; 'I often together with my friend to read' missing main verb 'go' and wrong word order -> sentence structure/verb issue (ID 26/6); 'under trees' needs article 'the' or plural with determiners, here 'the trees' more natural -> article error ID 22/17. Suggestion: Use 'the park' and 'the trees', use 'after studying' for actions, include verbs like 'go' for clarity and correct word order (subject + verb + complement).

× Living in a big city so I see more park my friend and I often. Rather a play it because it.

✓ Living in a big city, my friends and I often visit parks. We sometimes play there because it is relaxing.

Errors: Fragmented and incorrect connectors: 'Living in a big city so I see more park my friend and I often' is ungrammatical; needs reordering and pluralization -> sentence structure errors ID 26 and singular/plural issue ID 1; 'see more park' should be 'visit parks' or 'see more parks' -> verb choice and pluralization ID 1/6; 'my friend and I often' word order wrong; 'Rather a play it because it.' is incoherent, missing subject and verb and pronoun reference, should be 'We sometimes play there because it is relaxing' -> sentence structure and incorrect pronoun/use of articles ID 26/12/22. Suggestion: Keep clear subject-verb order, pluralize nouns when speaking generally (parks), and use pronouns 'there' to refer to places; express reason with 'because it is relaxing'.

× In the future I would do the park more grispy because umm, because it umm help me relax and. Walk my dog after.

✓ In the future I would visit parks more often because they help me relax, and I can walk my dog afterwards.

Errors: 'would do the park' is incorrect collocation; use 'would visit parks' or 'would go to the park' -> modal verb + verb collocation ID 4; 'more grispy' unknown word 'grispy' likely intended 'frequently' or 'more often' -> adjective/adverb error ID 13/20; 'because it umm help me' wrong verb form after modal/connector, should be 'they help me' (present tense general truth) -> subject-verb agreement/present tense ID 27/6; fragmented 'and. Walk my dog after.' missing subject and auxiliary, should be 'and I can walk my dog afterwards' -> sentence structure/modal usage ID 26/4. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs with modals ('would visit'), choose correct adverb 'more often' or 'more frequently', ensure plural subject 'parks' matches 'they', and include subject/auxiliary for second clause ('I can walk').