Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details joined with linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetitive filler words. Work on correct tense and simple grammar (e.g. 'when I was a child', 'I wanted to go to parks').

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks when I was a child because there was a large park near my house. I often went there with my friends to play football and have picnics, which made my childhood very happy.

제안: Give a clear present-tense answer then add one or two specific activities you do, using linking words (for example, 'so' or 'and'). Correct plural and verb forms (e.g. 'a small park', 'I go jogging', 'sit under the trees'). Keep responses to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. There is a small park near my home, so I sometimes go jogging there in the morning and later sit under the trees to relax.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one specific example. Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, 'because', 'for example'). Avoid vague or confusing sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because green spaces improve air quality and provide places to relax. For example, the large park in Besiktas is much bigger and nicer than many smaller parks, and more parks like it would benefit residents.

제안: Be specific about which park and why you want to visit it. Use full sentences and link reasons (for example, 'because', 'as') and give one detail about what attracts you (e.g. wildlife, scenery). Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit a large park in Syria that I have heard about because it has many butterflies and diverse plants. I think it would be wonderful for photography and to see wildlife up close.

× Uh, yes, when I, when I was child, I want to, uh, park, uh, parks, uh, with my friends.

✓ Uh, yes, when I was a child, I wanted to go to parks with my friends.

The original mixes past and present tenses and omits the article 'a'. The context is past (as a child), so use past tense 'wanted' instead of 'want' and include the indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. Also use the infinitive 'to go to parks' for clarity.

× Uh, because of that, uh, there is a huge park close to my house.

✓ Uh, there was a huge park close to my house.

The student is describing childhood (past), so 'there is' (present) is incorrect. Use past 'there was' to match the time frame.

× Uh, because of that, I want to, I often, uh, want to, uh, dark.

✓ Because of that, I often went there to play.

The sentence is confused and mixes tenses and wrong word 'dark'. In past context, use past tense 'went' and a clear verb like 'play' or 'spend time'. Replace 'dark' which is incorrect here.

× Yes, uh, I sometimes go to parks, uh, there is a, a small parks, uh, close to my house now and uh, I go to, I jogging, uh, the park sometimes sitting, uh, under the.

✓ Yes, I sometimes go to parks. There is a small park close to my house now, and I go jogging in the park sometimes and sit under the trees.

Multiple issues: tense mostly present is fine but 'a small parks' mixes article and plural—should be 'a small park' (singular). 'I go to, I jogging' is incorrect verb forms; use 'I go jogging' or 'I jog'. 'sitting, uh, under the.' was incomplete; supply 'trees' or 'a tree'. Corrections keep present tense and fix article, verb form, and missing noun.

× Yes, yes, there is a lot of parks in Besiktas.

✓ Yes, yes, there are a lot of parks in Besiktas.

Subject-verb agreement and quantifier: 'a lot of parks' is plural so use 'there are' instead of 'there is'.

× You'll this park is the is bigger than other parks.

✓ This park is bigger than the other parks.

The original has extraneous 'You'll' and duplicated 'is'. Remove 'You'll' and one 'is', and include the definite article 'the' before 'other parks' to refer to a specific group.

× Actually, uh, it can be, uh, there is a, uh, big park, uh, in Syria, uh, uh, a kind of, uh, butterflies, uh, in the park and uh, I would like to.

✓ Actually, there is a big park in Syria with many butterflies, and I would like to visit it.

The sentence is disfluent and mixes modal 'can be' unnecessarily. Use simple present 'there is' to state existence. 'a kind of butterflies' is incorrect; use 'many butterflies' or 'a butterfly garden'. Complete the idea with 'visit it' to finish the sentence.