Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and correct minor grammar/capitalization errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating obvious information.

예시: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my mother often took my brother and me to a nearby park where we played football and played hide-and-seek, which helped me make friends and stay active.

제안: Correct small grammar and repetition issues, and combine ideas with linking words. Give one clear reason and a brief example of when or how often you go to make it specific.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy parks as an adult because they help me relax after a busy day. For instance, I often spend 30 minutes walking in the park near my suburb after work to clear my mind and exercise.

제안: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g. "the IT"). Give a concise reason and one specific example or comparison to support your view.

예시: No, I don’t think more parks are necessary because my suburb already has plenty. For example, every neighborhood here has at least one small park with playgrounds and benches, so residents’ needs are generally met.

제안: Remove hesitations and unclear phrases like "one bag in my wish list." Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific plan and reason using linking words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. My coworker recommended a park near my workplace, and I plan to visit it next week after work so I can take a short walk and feel refreshed.

× Yes, I loved going to parks When I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child.

Capitalization error: 'When' should be lowercased because it continues the same sentence. This is not a tense error but falls under past tense context; ensure proper sentence casing. Suggestion: use lowercase 'when' after a comma or within the sentence.

× My mother used to take me and my brother to a park nearby my home where we could play football and hide and seek.

✓ My mother used to take my brother and me to a park near my home where we could play football and hide-and-seek.

Word order and article/phrase usage: 'take me and my brother' is acceptable but 'take my brother and me' is more natural; 'nearby my home' is incorrect preposition use — use 'near my home.' 'hide and seek' as a noun phrase should be hyphenated as 'hide-and-seek.' Suggestion: reorder pronouns to sound natural, use 'near' for location, and hyphenate compound noun.

× Yes, even as an adult I go to park a lot.

✓ Yes, even as an adult I go to the park a lot.

Missing definite article: English requires 'the' before 'park' when referring to parks in general as regular places one attends. Suggestion: use 'the park' when speaking about going to the park habitually.

× I feel so relaxed and refreshed after going to the park.

✓ I feel so relaxed and refreshed after going to the park.

Sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed; included for completeness.

× I I spend some of my time after work nearby the park in my suburb.

✓ I spend some of my time after work near the park in my suburb.

Typo and preposition use: duplicate 'I' should be single. 'Nearby the park' is less natural than 'near the park.' Suggestion: remove the extra 'I' and use 'near the park'.

× No I as there are already plenty of parks in my suburb as I'm living in Australia right now so the IT there are parks available in every suburb here.

✓ No, I don't. There are already plenty of parks in my suburb since I'm living in Australia right now, and there are parks available in every suburb here.

Multiple issues: missing verb and fragment 'No I as' unclear — needs a complete negative response ('No, I don't'). 'so the IT there are' seems like transcription errors; rephrase to 'and there are parks.' Use connectors correctly: 'since' or 'because' explains reason. Suggestion: provide a complete negative clause, remove stray words, and connect clauses with appropriate conjunctions.

× So the parks that already available have meets the residence requirements.

✓ So the parks that are already available meet the residents' requirements.

Missing auxiliary 'are' for passive adjective phrase: 'parks that already available' requires 'are.' Subject-verb agreement: 'parks ... meet' not 'have meets.' Possessive/plural noun: 'residence requirements' should be 'residents' requirements' or 'residential requirements' depending on meaning. Suggestion: add 'are,' use plural verb 'meet,' and correct noun form to 'residents' requirements'.

× Yes, I have one bag in my wish list, uh, that that's recommended by my coworker.

✓ Yes, I have one place on my wish list that was recommended by my coworker.

Word choice errors: 'one bag in my wish list' is incorrect — likely 'one place' or 'one park' on my wish list. Also remove filler 'uh' and correct 'that that's' redundancy. Tense: recommendation likely past ('was recommended'). Suggestion: choose correct noun ('place' or 'park') and remove fillers.

× It's nearby my workplace.

✓ It's near my workplace.

'Nearby' is an adverb or adjective and is better used without 'is' in this structure; 'near' is the correct preposition after 'is.' Suggestion: use 'near my workplace' for clarity.

× I think I'll go there by next week after work so that I can take a short walk and feel refreshed and relaxed.

✓ I think I'll go there next week after work so that I can take a short walk and feel refreshed and relaxed.

Use of 'by next week' implies before that time; if the speaker means 'sometime next week' 'next week' is clearer. Both are grammatically possible, but to match spoken intent, remove 'by.' Suggestion: use 'next week' for planned near-future actions.